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A Love a Lassie

 

If ever a boy stood so alone on a hill.

A warrior from battle after the kill

He looks for his love with a gentle sigh

And blue skies coast gently by.

 

He comes back to mind his lassie so.

He looks and surveys a panorama as though.

Being sent from heaven to mend a broken heart   .

Battle worn senses screaming to be together not apart.

 

A god sent to from a time which is long long lost.

A searching spirit cast into limbo a ghost.

She cries a heart so broken waiting to mended

The heathers shrouds mystically blended.

 

His heart weeps gently for the soul of his lassie.

His bairn golden locks eyes that light the night.

Casting glances ore the valley for he is almost home.

He can smell the sweet smell of the peat burning bright.

 

He looks skyward and his heart drifts minds of love.

He looks to the  land as the earth kisses his worn feet so much pain the brain doesn’t understand.

Shelter and love is the only focus in the mind of the boy now the man.

If his god has chosen he will be in the greater plan.

 

Down a winding road its an unfamiliar path.

She waits with rivers of tears.

Banished into to past their mortal fears.

Arms wide open the fold of a lovers haven.

 

— kinganeye, Jul 08, 2007

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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

you are

what we call "flooding." While I encourage you to keep writing and submit your work it is very difficult to give honest feedback not only to you, but to all writers when one writer posts so much at a time. I'm sure you have a lot of poems past present and future that you would like to share, as does everyone on here. Just remeber that you'll give yourself more of a chance to get honest and helpful reviews if you pace yourself. Mark
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kinganeye

18 years 11 months ago

Re Flooding?

Flooding you have the opportunity read or not read as the case may be. I am a very well published poet and I do not seek comments as such if you feel you want to comment then stop looking at volume. If you want to comment negative just because of volume same the pen strokes. John
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

you know

I was being professional John, not trying to be negative. If you want to stroke your own ego and throw things out there like "I am a very well published poet..." blah blah blah, that is fine. So are most of us, welcome to the club. I like quillsvein's quote: "Being a famous poet is like being famous in your own family." ie., learn some humility, it will serve you well. We have a good community here, one that is adept at supporting each other and giving / receiving valuable feedback. I've seen your type before. God bless and have fun posting your poems. Mark
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kinganeye

18 years 11 months ago

I am trying to make the

I am trying to make the point that seems to really escape you is that if I am submitting to a new site I am trying to put up a varations of work. I have absolute humility I write for myself and if others like then fine then that is nice. I am very critical of what I write and the point I was trying to get across and seems lost is the word humality I do not think that I am good or great I have never said that nor would I dare to profess that. If some one likes what you write then they will read on if not they will not.I have no problem in supporting others It gives me great pleasure to be able to show how I write and allow others to develop their own styles. I do think your attitude is a bit presumptios when you really do not know what I am about. I have no arrogance when it comes to my work and I hope this is an end to this pettiness. John Nicholson
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poet_inside

18 years 11 months ago

I agree with mark

Its not that you are takeing up space or the fact that you can't write, because plainly we can see you can. But you are also takeing away from the other posters by posting so much, you have to scroll and scroll makeing it less likely there poem will be read or commented on. Its not just about you its about everyone. I won't argue back and forth, I just felt that it needed to be said. Sorry if it offends you but sometimes you have to look past the small things and see the big picture!!!!! Brittany Rae