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Dream World

i have been to hell and back

I have seen the lightning crack

I have heard the songs you sing

I have felt the love you bring

But i can’t seem to let go

 

I have been to the ends of earth

I have seen a new day’s birth

I have heard the words you speak

I have felt you trembling weak

But i can’t seem to tell myself no

 

When you speak your words untrue

When you fix your heart with glu

When you lie a million words

When you kill a mocking bird

You just can’t seem to say you know

 

And i know I’ve no gold

And i know i’m not bold

And i know i’m not strong

And i know that im so wrong

But i know i love you so

And i know i need you so

And i know i want you so

And i know i love your soul

 

Say goodbye to the real world

Say hello to dream world

This place is so surreal

But your the only thing i dream is real

But i will never know-

No i will never know

 

You have been in my mind

You have been lost in my time

You have been the one i seek

You’re the one who makes me weak

You’re the one who i see

You’re the one i know i need

You’re the one i love

— A. M. Painter, Jul 07, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

I like the structure

the whole 3rd stanza badly takes away from the rest. Have a cold hard look at it, cheers, Jess

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