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Your Imagination

The air feels hot tonight.

A chill runs down the spine.

A feeling that’s not right.

But in ones heart, its fine.

She stands and looks at you.

Is that your cue.

Do you stand back.

Retreat, not attack.

And admire her vision.

Your illusion.

Sweet scented breeze.

A smell that will please

Carried on an air stream.

As in the head the dream.

You reach to touch.

You want to so much.

Hand stretched out.

There creeps in doubt.

Hand filled with empty air.

She isn’t there.

She lives in your head.

Her beauty is feed.

By your imagination.

 

— kinganeye, Jul 06, 2007

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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

Welcome to neopoet!

Good to see you're posting. To be really really really honest (and I certainly don't want to discourage you on your first post) it seems like you're just trying too hard and reaching for rhymes. Relax when you write, if it's not coming naturally chances are it's not there. I look forward to reading more of your work. Mark
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poet_inside

18 years 11 months ago

I like it

I like this poem, it embraces the feeling of reaching for something in life that just isn't there and the dispair that it brings to a person. I think its a good piece.