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— Rottiestyl, Jul 06, 2007

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: USA - Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe

Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

Kim, you are the most brilliant female poet i have encountered.

Don't react yet! I say female poet as a class, not a diminuition. Most overtly female poets are self deprecating. You express the pain WE cause you without self diminishment. I often feel I might be mis-understanding your work, but appreciating it in my way. That's got to be ok with you because you have no choice but please tell me, this time, if I got it wrong. cheers, Jess

Rottiestyl

18 years 11 months ago

I guess you have it right

She sees men or man as a shadow. Nothing there, just hanging around. And when the things in her life get dark (so to speak, problems etc.) he is no where to be found. He is not her equal, because if he were he would feel what she feels( where are the dark circles beneath his eyes from worry) but safely disappears behind the wall( keeps himself at a distance). If she wants to rid herself of him, she simply tells him her troubles (the dark alley) and what will he do? leave (containment). Hope that helps and stop calling me brilliant you still haven't read my STORY! K. Mulroney

Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

raw with anger, disappointment and pain.

once again I kick myself for reading the comments before totally immersing myself in the poem. Kind of like reading the end of a book first, because I had an opinion of the poem before I read it. It's funny because I could picture my wife writing something like "But where are his dark circles?" which I would find tragic, because yes, he should have them, but she should not demand them. That goes both ways. Sometimes I feel like we want to see the dark circles in the eyes of our loves, rather than trying to share the load. I know what you're saying though, Kim, don't misunderstand. You are saying you feel he doesn't share the load. I guess mine is just a different perspective. Mark

Rottiestyl

18 years 11 months ago

This is what I call a generic poem

It's really about those men (and women) who get into relationships with someone and all is peachy until one of them has a problem. There are alot of men(hate to say it but it is true of the majority. Not men but complaints by women) Can't or won't help the person they say they care for thru a crisis or be interested in them and what they do. It's just easier to ignore it. Not saying he/she doesn't love them but more at a distance. It's like my husband. I tell him a poem was published, he says "great" never removing his eyeballs from the tv. So, I deal with it this way, He tells me his brand new chainsaw is broken and I say "great" never removing my eyes from my writing. I could be named the next worlds greatest writer, have published books and agents etc. He would say "great, what time is the Cub game on?" I am a baseball and football fan. I cheer louder than anyone I know. But will suffer thru 4 hrs. of Nascar, which I can't stand because he likes it. THAT is what the poem is really about I think. The refusal to givethe trival thing to the one say you love. This was not meant to be some deep head piece guys! Now, you two have me thinking waaay to much. shame on you. K. Mulroney