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Hell and Alcohol

my hell starts with morning,I open my eyes,

last night I prayed for death but,fuck god Im alive,

(shits eating you up inside)

Im fucking drunk and alone in a shit hole,

no one to turn to,no where to go,

(nothings in control)

I need a goddamn drink,my mind is diseased,

I’ve suffered for so long,I want to be free,free,free,

I cant trust no one I cant even love,

(its that damn girl your thinking of)

hate all the memories,like pain in this world,

fuck your goddamn past,forget the girl,

Im not afraid to die,I fear to live,

Ive come to realize,peace of mind dont exist,

(its something your fucked with)

burn all the memories,Im not sane in this world,

fuck all the living,forget the girl.

(forget the girl)

— billy, Jul 05, 2007

Critiques

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JT1

18 years 11 months ago

Any

poem that has the liquid love in it gets my thumps up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)

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