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walls of suffering

pain flows through me,I scream to die,

how can I ever heal with death on my mind,

I’ve got no where to go In this fucked up world,

with day after day,bare more lonelyness,

I die before I live,I live to die,

this world has brought me hell that burns my mind,

sorrow,guilt and hate,feed my soul to flames,

self poison all my wounds with torment and shame,

dreams begin to die I,ve fell apart,I’ve let the hate control my broken heart,

so this is how it ends,with our dying truth,todays another day closer to doom,

I never was alive,i’ll never be alive,

before I am deceived the night will come,

my demons will arrive and my heart will run,

I cant escape these dark,walls of suffering,

my past had foretold me,I’ve become nothing,

I never was alive,i’ll never be alive,

I pray for my wounds to heal over time,dying.

— billy, Jul 05, 2007

Critiques

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JT1

18 years 11 months ago

I suffer

and this poem too...weep I do, thanks!
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billy

18 years 11 months ago

heres a little something for u

my name is jt1 and i like the taste of cum the kind of cum u get from a dogs hard dick but hey thats ok cuz im gay everyday and i like that way when ur cocks in my face just give me a little taste of that delicious sperm bank my name is jtcum and ill suck off everyone
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Quillsvein1

18 years 11 months ago

Raw

A raw, honest statement of horrible pain. Could work on the punctuation and all that kind of thing if you're interested in doing so?
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billy

18 years 11 months ago

not really

i know my grammar really fucking sux but i dont care if u can get some enjoyment out of it then thats fine with me im a very impatient person so i dont care for that my shitty grammar just tells u i suck at it and i just dont give a fuck but hey i hope u enjoyed the poem though

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