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Let's Get Humble

Let’s get humble
let’s get meek
let’s get serious
and sleek.
Let’s get aggressive
let’s get sexual
let’s burn the place
to the ground
where it’s low.
Let’s get
smiles on our faces
and words in our mouths
truth.
Let’s get close
and let’s get impersonal
let’s get
raw with each other
there’s no other way to be.
Let’s get down on each other
till it’s word pornography.
Let’s get insane
in a deadly serious way
till we’re seen for who
we really aren’t.
Aren’t yet,
anyway.
Let’s get off the ground
off our knees
off the couch
and out of bed
let’s get the passion
the fashion
and the action going
get
humble
get radiant get
the smell of incense in your head
and music in your ears
where?
Inside
on the inside baby let’s
get ahead of the game
and off our knees
what we’ve got here
is word pornography,
see,
be
humble,
in control
they don’t know you
no,
you and I
are humble
to a fault.
Come crashing down
downtown
Bad, bad Leroy Brown
the clown who stayed a dozen months
and now?
Where is he now?
He bound -
had a cow and bound
for a night on the town
riddle me riddle me riddle me
clown
for I am
humble now.
 
                   

— Conect11, Jul 05, 2007

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JT1

18 years 11 months ago

JT1

Nice work here.
Q

Quillsvein1

18 years 11 months ago

Hostile beauty

This is a no-holds-barred call to social revolution, personal revolution, and a host of other things--a fairly direct one, at that. If I can properly say you belong to a tradition it is certainly that of the Beats or the early Surrealists. You belong to anti-traditions, actually: I don't think it's appropriate to critique the technical aspects of your work because you are unflinchingly direct and unabashed in your approach to the reader. Inspiring, rebellious material.
C

Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

yeah yeah

I think that one was a gimme cause I gave you such a great review for "He is..." f*cking P*ssy! LOL!
B

barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

as to "Yeah Yeah" ...

obligations are for filling, but at times dentists do hurt when they make their killing. As to the piece, this is a wonderfully wonderful (in fact, quite good) set of words put to fine use on a virtual page. But ... while you further proofread, would you please fix insense to incense (unless, of course, you intended insense---in which case, forget I mentioned it. It's bugging me. A couple other things I might mention, but I don't want to spoil my appreciation mood. Thanx again, Chuckles
C

Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

As to me

I've no defense, I did mispell incense noticed when I wrote it hence, I made a minor change a little minor rearrange and you might think this strange: it's not saved on my computer! Oh the awful thought! That I possibly forgot that my work would be for naught it's not saved on my computer! Please bring up these other things without pulling any strings my poetry sings when there is true criticism. Mark
B

barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

OK. At Least Another

How about capitalizing brown, as in Leroy Brown? But I'll say it again, if you wanted it the way it is, forget 'twas ever mentioned. More regards, Chuck PS: As to your comment in response to mine last, I'd recommend misspell for mispell. You're welcome!
C

Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

lol!

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Q

Quillsvein1

18 years 11 months ago

Bingo

You're more perceptive than I thought--you're right! LOL!! Thanks for the opportunity. J/K--good poem, really.
J

JT1

18 years 11 months ago

BINGO

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