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Angles and Deamons

Forget your dreams and ambitions

forget everything you ever knew

this world is too small to allow everyone everything

so in your dreams you fail yourself

but why settle for less?

in your heart you feel depressed

but why give up?

 

take your visions and all of your forgiveness

and give it to the world that has forsaked you

and take from them their pride

for this world is filled with angles and deamons

but you seem to be inbetween

 

Take your worries and inhibitions

your passion and your predjudices

and let them all out

show the world what you are made of

But dont give in when the world is at your fingertips

— A. M. Painter, Jul 04, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

Not as good as "Sorry"

Poems in the "you" is very hard to do. They tend to sound preachy, but I still experiment with it myself. See "What you see". There are good concepts stated, but a bit clumsily, may I suggest more work? Look at the flow of your language, cheers, Jess

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