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The Silent Grains of Sand (a parable)

Morning’s sun rising from the horizon

leisurely dissolves the blanket of mist 

losing its grasp of the shimmering surface -

exposing a sea of diamonds sharing their

secrets with the shoreline’s grains of sand.

 

Adam and Eve - original witnesses in

a brand new world all to themselves,

found that perfection leads to vexation in the

cradle of civilization’s raw material, waiting

impatiently through vast primordial days.

 

Oh, the scenes these silent diamonds and grains

of sand must have visited through the millennia;

and the chronicles they surely witnessed - if only

they might have had tongues with which to speak!

 

The glorious sounds of old Eden -

Daniel’s cries in the lion’s den -

the tempest engulfing Noah’s ark -

the last roar …  of the last …  dinosaur!

 

Evening’s sun gently scatters its palette of

startling hues in the heavens and finally

withdraws its luster from earth’s timid grasp.

 

The diamonds of morning stream heavenward anew

to resume their secret dialogue and sustain once more

the parable of the silent grains of sand.

 

The revolving cycle is completed for now - the

diamonds of morning bask in their starry glory.

 

As the rising sun brings another new dawn,

the whole process of life is once more begun.

 

The message of the parable of the silent grains of sand

 

Will remain swathed in silence - shielded forevermore.

— Will Searles Carman, Jul 02, 2007

Critiques

WC

Will Searles Carman

18 years 10 months ago

The Silent Grains of Sand

Thanks, Joe - I appreciate your kind words. I've made so many little adjustments and revisions since coming up with the basic idea that it is a lot cleaner now than the original. Maybe I should leave it alone now. I read somewhere that Robert Frost (no, I'm NOT comparing myself to him) claimed that only certain words would suffice in his poetry, but his editor loudly complained that Frost continuously made changes even after his work was in the printing stage. Anyway, I thank you for your thoughts and comments. Will
WC

Will Searles Carman

18 years 10 months ago

The Silent Grains of Sand

Hey there, jss - Thanks for the kind words - and I like having you on my side of the bread. (better put the butter in the fridge next time) As for that line, I'm not an afficianado (sp) of old movies, but it sounds a lot like Humphrey Bogart - or maybe even Hoagy Carmichael. Am I a zillion miles off? Will
WC

Will Searles Carman

18 years 10 months ago

The Silent Grains of Sand

jss - I don't remember seeing a rebuttle poem from you. Did you post it? One of the things I was going after had to deal with the form/format of this one - 5 5, 4 4, 3 3, 2 2, 1 1 verse lines. There may have been lots of poems like this, but I doubt if I've ever come accross it before. Will
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

Will your poem

It captivated me and was like a magnet. Thanks for bringing this here and I am very happy I found it. Mark
WC

Will Searles Carman

18 years 10 months ago

The Silent Grains of Sand

Thanks so much, Mark. We always enjoy complimentary words about our efforts. I really enjoy poetry these days. Seems crazy because for most of my life I had little use for it at all. I find myself working in a variety of literary media. Other projects in my barn include a full length (70,000+ words) book of essays that is currently undergoing what I hope will be its final update and revision. Also have a novelette 1/2 way done, a bunch of miscellaneous articles and a couple of stalled full novels. Too many projects in the works so I keep redirecting my energy all over the place. Look forward to seeing some of your work, Mark. Keep writing - Will
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

Best of luck to you

Best of luck, Will, with al your work. I finished a novelette only to find naming names and writing of real places can be a bad thing so it is back on the "drawing board". I doubt I will get to it soon after that dissapointment but I continue to learn and I think that is good. Mark
WC

Will Searles Carman

18 years 9 months ago

a parable

Mark, you've got it as they say in good old England. No, I've never had the good fortune to visit there. The point is, "learning" is what it's all about. It's the best thing we can achieve from all of our efforts in writing - and reading, of course. And I'm not talking about academic learning, though that has its place, too. I just believe we learn the most and the quickest by doing. Every time we put something together on paper it will be a learning experience if we put our hearts and souls into it. Sorry if I come across like a teacher, Mark, but I was a teacher for 34 years so that's the way it seems to come out. I surely don't mean to be a know it all - like all of us I have to really struggle, sometimes over and over, to achieve some degree of satisfaction. Mark, do you belong to any writing group wherever you live? That could be most helpful. But continue to study your work and that of others. Will

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