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persister
Jun 26, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

wander

walking, waliking

under the tenderness of the moon

staring, smiling

at the stars not at gloom

crying, asking

"why do i have to leave so soon?"

— persister, Jun 26, 2007
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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

Hi persister

(great nick) Welcome to neopoets, enjoyed your poem, flows well, simple but meaningful, child-like yet adult. I would be a hypocrite to say watch out for -ing as a rhyme, cos I use it all the time, but it can get boring, trying, even tiring. 8) cheers, Jess

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