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— Rottiestyl, Jun 18, 2007

About the Author

Region, Country: USA - Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe

Critiques

weirdelf

19 years 1 month ago

Acidly beautiful

I don't need to say much about your work, Kim except that it keeps on improving each time I read each one. Yours is a hard place. I suspect your work has often before been scorned or disregarded because the readers were too stupid or lazy to bother apprehending it. At the same time I can only say don't change! I know you are tough. But that's not enough. Endurance. At this risk of being sexist I suspect that women are better at it than men. I believe in you and deeply respect your work. Jess

Rottiestyl

19 years 1 month ago

I do so appreciate your

I do so appreciate your words, and your support. The only time I have trouble with something of mine disregarded was when I was, and I stress WAS a member of Poets.com, what a side show that place is. I post in places that you have to search out and those writers take the time to see to the blooodied meat of things. I guess in that respect I have been lucky. K. Mulroney

Conect11

19 years 1 month ago

now that the fire has died down.

I agree and disagree with you, Jess. I think Kim's work deserves a closer look, however to say that "I suspect your work has often before been scorned or disregarded because the readers were too stupid or lazy to bother apprehending it" is dangerous, because that allows no introspection. I too, would not ask Kim to change. (sorry, know I'm being public here.) However, it is very easy for a writer to say to themselves "oh, they just don't get it, and it's a fault of their own." And that does nothing to improve the writer. They do not learn how to relate. A case in point, from outside of writing: When I was in college there was a woman named Sallie Carnahan. She was an excellent chef, as far as her technical skills went. Unfortunately for all of us (and believe it or not, for her as well) she knew it, and told us every chance she got. She also told her instructors every chance she got. Now, because Sallie had gotten into this mindset it was very difficult for her to learn, because her skill set was so ingrained in her she could not adjust to her surroundings, to the teachings of our instructors. She took the attitude of "I can't learn anything from these people." And by golly, she didn't. She became dead in the water. I guess what I'm trying to say is that when we blow off other people's opinions, even if we don't like them, or we see the person as being inferior to us in some way, then we suffer the risk of growing stagnant. Just something to ponder. God bless, Mark

Rottiestyl

19 years 1 month ago

Mark,

If I could just slide in here and help you all out some. Don't know if this will explain everything but let me try. It is not that I would not want to learn new writing techniques etc. Or learn a different way to express what it is I am saying in a poem. I can only write one way. No, let me re-phrase that. Up until a year ago. I would read and re-read every word I put to paper. Nothing ever sounded right. It still doesn't if you want my honest review of myself. Nothing I write sounds finished to me. My daughter said it best; When you change your gut instinct and manipulate what you first put on paper, it immediately changes that poem forever. It will never be what you original felt. In my case, she is right. I live by instinct. It was something forced on me, not my choice. But I have adapted in such a way that I know what I feel. I know at that one moment when it hit the paper, that's it. Now I am not talking about the if's, don'ts, the's and now's, I mean the meat. You said it the other day. You said there are some poets who will spend months even years (and I have heard of this)On one piece. Have to have the perfect word. The perfect verse and they don't care how long that takes. I simply can not write like that. My poems take me under ten minutes to write. It may take me ten days reach that one moment when I can sit in front of the computer and pound it out. I don't change ANYTHING. It's like Sammy Sosa when he was with the Cubs. He was on a hitting streak and wore the same pair of underwear everyday until the streak stopped (yes, he said he washed them!) I write what I write because that's what is living in me. Yes, I can learn from others and do. But, I won't change the way it's done because it belongs to me. I only loan it to you. I hope all that made some kind of sense. I am starting to really enjoy you guys...Yes, Joe you are included. You are not as vicious as you like to come across. K. Mulroney

Conect11

19 years 1 month ago

totally

feel where you're coming from on how you write, I certainly don't want you to change. I used to say "once a poem is done it's done." For some reason lately I've been able to change minor things, but like you said: the meat of the poem remains. I am curious when I said that about some poets taking ten years, etc. I honestly done remember that sage wisdom, lol!

Rottiestyl

19 years 1 month ago

I think it was during the

I think it was during the lovers spat we all were having. But I have heard that many times. Some well known writers have said this same thing in interviews I have seen. Personally, If I had to take ten years to come up with the perfect verse, I would give up and play shadow hockey. K. Mulroney

Conect11

19 years 1 month ago

ten years

to find the perfect verse? Now that sounds like some serious mental masterbation.

Conect11

19 years 1 month ago

I wish

that all of the girls who broke my heart, or whose hearts I had broken when I was younger had this poem. Kim, it is outstanding, simply put. I think everyone has played both roles mentioned here in their lives. Whether they'd like to admit it or not. Each verse flows well, and there is a deceptive tenderness, a caring for the person being targeted, even though the writer knows she will eventually have to make him bleed. At least that's my take. The only thing I see at first glance is you may want to change "too" into "to."

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