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weirdelf
weirdelf
Jun 23, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

On buying a very big book of photos of the universe

bought the universe today
pored over it and cried
still homesick
didn’t get it back

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

I think

I have that book. Damn the Hubble telescope! I don't think this poem needs to be expanded so much as it needs to be fleshed out, you're just missing "something," and I can't figure out what. It's like it's almost there.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Like Kim

I find it very hard to go back to edit work, but this one I think I will cheers, Jess
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

I get it

Trying to feel AT home in this world can be a lonely thing. Still homesick to me means, a person trying to find the place where they belong and nowhere in the photos of the Universe did a spark of recognition apprear. Very deep for such a short write. I like it Jess. You have alot of you running around in your head. You think that maybe your lost, but your not. Your right here where I can see you. Nice writing! K. Mulroney
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Close! 8)

but actually I am an alien, just homesick, that's all cheers, Jess