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poor little rat (revised)
i was peacefully watching tele
involved in scotch
and quite a full belly
when from the kitchen rustlings came
i knew that there was no-one home
my flatmates errant
rage, rave and roam
so for rustlings someone else to blame
i crept up slow and took a look
there was a rat
intently chewing on my book
oh you rodent shame shame shame
the warrior within me woke
i grabbed a hefty stick
then that heathenous rat did poke
one mighty blow did smite it lame
poor little rat
wobbled and crawled
towards the door but that’s not that
now i must take a different tone
some remorse had found a home
within my breast once raging pure
now dwelled a feeling not unlike manure
I killed it dead
and without compunction
sent it sewerly ahead
I don’t like killing
but let the message be clear
only vermin right willing
to die
should enter here
Comments
barbsdad2003
18 years 10 months ago
I Say to Admire:
weirdelf
18 years 10 months ago
appreciate your comment
weirdelf
18 years 10 months ago
why do the stanza breaks
andrew
18 years 10 months ago
There's a filter
Mark
17 years 11 months ago
Thanks for that
waterdragon
18 years 8 months ago
Right willin' indeed!
IKnowNoBox
18 years 7 months ago
A common thing shared among us ...
Conect11
18 years 7 months ago
I am amazed
weirdelf
18 years 7 months ago
Actually I call myself a "ratbag"
Conect11
18 years 7 months ago
you know
weirdelf
18 years 7 months ago
yep! a whole bloody bag of rats!
wolfycat
18 years ago
Liked your poem...
LadyTheresa
56 years 4 months ago
Weirdelf
weirdelf
18 years ago
thanks lady, glad you like it
purplemoondoll
18 years ago
Rats scare the hell out of
Candlewitch
18 years ago
Not to feel bad, Jess, as it
Mark
18 years ago
Cool story
Barbara Writes
18 years ago
Funny Story
LadyTheresa
56 years 4 months ago
Capitalization wher needed
RSScheerer
18 years ago
serves it right!
Emmanuel Moore
18 years ago
Nice Work
weirdelf
18 years ago
oh yes!