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Rottiestyl
Rottiestyl
Jun 20, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Region, Country: USA - Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe

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Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Why?

Are you pissed at me? It is still MY poem. It is about a life of deadends. It has meaning Jess, just wanted to add to the dark side of poetry like others do. I have alot of dark poetry, I even have a trilogy. I have no clue why you would be upset. Explain please. K. Mulroney
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

my bad

It was your comment "I don’t really like this piece. I don’t know where it came from really, other than I was trying to write a Raven poem because everybody else has..lo1!" that made me think I had been tricked into taking too seriously something that was just an exercise. I didn't read properly what you wrote after that. All is cool. cheers, Jess
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Just so you you know

I feel everything I write Jess. What I meant was that everyone I know and have read had written a Raven poem. I was going thru some of Poe's poetry and believe it or not had never read the Raven before. I was surprised about the way he wrote other poetry. One in particular was about his mother-in-law. It was quite flattering and very easy to read. Anyway, I finally read The Raven that night and decided since everyone else had written one and his was outstanding, I wanted to see what I would come up with, without rhyming it. And this was what I came up with. It has a message in it. Self Salvation. Hope that helps. K. Mulroney
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

for the record...

ok, this first thing has nothing to do with your poem per se, Kim. I apologize. It's just that Poe ruined it for me with Ravens. (oh, that and the fact that my beloved Browns became the Ravens, lol!) But seriously, every time I see ravens or phoenixes (I know, I had one in "Leech," but that was the name of a coffee house)in a poem I'm just like "not THIS again!" But this is my fault, not yours. As to your poem, I like how your first stanza flows, though you may have a typo with "northing" in there. "I am thrown into the gales of grayed depression" is an awesome line, and eloquently says: "I'm depressed." I like that alot. As I do "She devours the useless fragments That held me captive. Her caw is cavernous, a thunderous croak." The middle I'm not quite so hot on, I think your language gets a bit choppy in the third and fourth stanzas, but it could be the way I'm reading it. Or the fact that I hate ravens! lol
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Truthfully?

I don't really like this piece. I don't know where it came from really, other than I was trying to write a Raven poem because everybody else has..lo1! I actually think Poet Raven was excellent. I was hypnotized by how awesome the rhyme was. But thanks for the honest review I will stay away from all black bird from now on! K. Mulroney
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

lol!

and damn pheasants!