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Region, Country: USA - Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe

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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Kim!

it's not here and there Joe looks foolish; he looks foolish everywhere Love your work! Joe tries his darndest to stomp on it, but it's too far above and beyond him---and his pinkish, clodhoppered feet can't reach. ---Chuck
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Thanks for the review, All I

Thanks for the review, All I ever wanted was constructive reviews. Don't know any other way to say it. Thanks for stopping by! K. Mulroney
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Well you fell for it eh Joe?

Well you fell for it eh Joe? We knew you would do this. One review wasn't enough, had to come back three times in a row? My, my, marking territory is busy business. For anyone else reading this. There is a note on this poem that it was meant for fun only but Sir Joe had to turn it into a bad College Thesis. But he says I never went to college. I guess those two years and 161 course hours was a figment of my non poetic imagination. I still talk to my Engineering advisor, I'll have to let him know it wasn't really me in there. lol! K. Mulroney
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

I am silenced. You will

I am silenced. You will Never know how hard that was to accomplish! All I can say in my defense of hard to understand writing is it is my belief that good poetry makes the reader dive inside the words. If I had the explantion front and center then I might as well write a grocery list. It's hard to misconstrue a loaf of bread and 2% milk (don't forget the tampons, you have a woman at home.) Yes, I do ramble, but I write for me. Honestly. I know exactly what I am trying to say. Even when it's just meant for fun, somewhere in there I have a meaning, as skewed as it may be. I do so appreciate your review and don't mind the sparring in the Kim Joe show. I am by nature a fighter. Something I am not proud of, but comes in handy. I did not mean to " brag" about my publishings as I was accused of, the profile asks you to tell about yourself and I did. I left out alot, because alot of people find it un-nerving, for lack of a better description. I do write in a smart ass realm at times. Something I was born with. I have utilized that by writing a book called " In Your Face". Pretty much sums up the content. Almost done with it. Once again, thank you for your time and much appreciated words of praise. I look forward to posting more. By the way, do you know how to get short stories read here? I posted a story poem last night in short stories but not sure how to get it read. Any help would be appreciated! Have a great day Jess. K. Mulroney
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I don't want you silenced!

By every god I don't believe in! And never apologise for the difficulty of your work. I don't believe in difficulty for cleverness or obscurity sake but sometimes it is necessary to say something that could not be said any other way. That I applaude. And frankly, un-fuck the lazy-minded cretins who want the orgasm before the the foreplay. It happens that when I first posted on this site some people complained about having to reach for their dictionaries (although some of them don't even still seem to have one) I would like an end to acrimony on this site. Will look for your story now and get back to you. cheers
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

That would depend on where

That would depend on where you would like to bury that hatchet, Joe. I am quite fond of my head AND back. I would like you to be you with less you showing. You can be honest without twisting the knife to sever the artery. That is all I ask of you, me and anyone else. K. Mulroney
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

hatched?

don't you mean HATCHET?! I mean, to bury the hatched would be to bury lot's and lot's of eggs...
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

oh don't worry, Joe

as Bill Murray said in Lost in Translation: "What, was nobody here to shower you with affection?" lol, I scanned through your poem, and it looks good on first glance, however because I am at work right now I can't give the serious look at it or any other poem I would like to right now, all you would get is the "great job!" "Top notch!" kind of review that doesn't help anybody. So patience, young Skywalker, you'll get your review in due time. Aka after Rosa Parks should be too, not to. LOL! You all need to lighten the f*ck up! It's a freaking website! And a poetry one at that. We do this for FUN, people. If we hit a homerun, great, if not, woopdeedoo. What have we learned this weekend? That each and everyone of us with the possible exception of Dave and Louis are pricks? That we all have huge egos? C'mon, admit it, we're all artists, we're all known for it. So Kim, Joe pissed in your pot. I can tell you from my experiences with him that he wasn't trying to rain on your parade, that's just Joe. Once you get to know him he's not so bad. And publicly, for the record I am sorry for any animosity that I contributed to. If somebody bashes another poet publically on this site, no matter who it is, I will stick up for them. And from my vantage point, you were doing that to Joe. In your defense, however, perhaps I forgot what it was like to be a "newbie" here, and feel like my work was underappreciated. Hey, remember we all click "knock me on my back." As Jess says, I do not want to have fighting here, again, it's a WEBSITE. However, you have to want the same, the antagonism on all sides has to stop. I will admit that I was wrong to say some of the things I said, I have no idea if your work is inane drivel because after you started trying to fight with what seemed like everybody I gave up reading your work. Now, hopefully we can all settle down and go back to the business of poetry. And Kim, we were both wrong on the copyright business, according to the copyright office "On or about July 1, 2007: The Office proposes a reduced fee of $35 for an electronic filing of a basic copyright registration. The current $45 fee for a paper application will be retained (read more)." I said $40, you said $130. So the compromise is $45, which I can live with.
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

What?!

What do you mean, Joe, by you were someone's baby? When I take it literally, I find that too hard to believe. Love, Chuckles
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Your works

Hey Kim, I have just finished re-reading all the poetry you have posted on this site, Just do the Math, Anatomy of Fault, Steel Bound and Loose, Ghosts Die, Follow Me ( You First ) and Craven. I am profoundly moved and disturbed. Your work is so clever as to be almost deceitful! You use conceits (although I am sure you must be familiar with the use of that word in a poetic context, for the benefit of other readers it doesn't mean self-satisfied it means a fanciful poetic image, especially an elaborate or exaggerated comparison) like the Maths thing that allow a casual reader to skip over what is really happening. Even the "ramblings" are far more lucid than they seem at first glance. But something nagged at me after reading each of them that made me come back and I found an opium den of poetic richness and emotional cognisance. I am awed. Your work is not easy, especially on the illumined screen, the printed page would allow it to seep in more gently. Even then it needs work to apprehend. But it is very, very good. I used to hate Auden, not really comparing you, because he made me work. But the rewards of working into your work are, in my opinion, greater. I stand by my crit of Ghosts Die, I shouldn't have had to know the intent of the work or you should have stated it. But once known it was beautiful and all the others are beautiful, scary, clever and funny (in different mixtures and degrees) I have avoided your.. um .. dialogue with Joe. We are not a "Gang of Three" although I repect and admire both of them we can fight like... um... Kim and Joe? 8) Look very much forward to a collection of your works in one volume. cheers
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

Math?

as the face is what I most always see first I get stuck on multiplying a third of you by what? Which third? It seems there are truly five that I have found - so the face seems a bit distorted to me. On the inside or "the feelings" part of you I feel a great refreshment with the use of "a sort of math" in the expression of your "I was hurt" poem. I enjoyed it very much - a good experience for me. Thanks, Mark