barbsdad2003

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somewhen

if I should see him shopping
at the mall

or at somewhere somewhen
down a hall,

I’ll be sure to congratulate
St. Paul

on his play in last week’s volleyball

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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Again!

you're kidding, right? you miss something obvious, Joe there's religious satire/irony in these here hills ... altho I know you don't value subtlety! not sorry this is too funny

barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

do you not know ...

of St. Paul? (honest question)

barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

a college class (anymore) and I prefer not to be you keep comparing (and contrasting) over and over ... and in the process miss the point over and over when you stop looking to the side and instead look at the core---and without internal popcorn distractions---you might get a better look-see incidentally, college grads don't impress me it takes a lot more than that

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Well I got it no prob

It is once again a light take on a serious spiritual issue. When was the last time any of us had a beer with or gave some acknowledged feedback to god or any of the saints or angels? With a deft hand at language to boot. Look forward to reading all your stuff, cheers

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Forgive me if I'm wrong on this, barbsdad

and I probably should not take it on myself to explain your work but Joe's seemingly determined thickness on this is getting to me. Joe, it means for all the bloody good St bloody Paul (or probably any other bloody saint) does any of us, if we could speak to them at all, it might just as well be about volleyball cheers

barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

I think

One could fill a fat book on the multitude of meanings embraced by this simple piece which embraces philosophical and religious meanings so vastly. As you can, I think, see for yourself, Joe would be the last one to read such a book. It's apparent that all his college past is not helpful here---and I'm not a bit surprised by that. He has trouble with simple; on the other hand, he can't get complex, either. (You know I love you, Joe!) You did, incidentally, pick up one of its cogent meanings. With a few more looks on alternate sunny/cloudy days, you might see there is more than a short list here. Thanx. Yours, Chuck

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

of course

but I thought "one step at a time" 8)cheers

Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

I'm

not going nearly so deep here. Good write, the rhyme scheme works well for this poem, especially with how you wrapped up the final stanza. Once again Dr. Seuss like, lol!

barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

That's one of the great things about this shortie:

you don't have to go deep--- or even wet your feet--- to enjoy. Thanx. Chuckles

HaroHalola

16 years 10 months ago

barbsdad2003 - Well, you

barbsdad2003 - Well, you have been touted to me as the man-analoguepoet, tho' my Work posted here is quantifiably-spare vis-a-vis new membership; however, I've heard an immediate affinity-ring in your Work, & happily a Poet of invention & precision. Your responses to responses serve to edify, acknowledge, spiritedly-chide... This Piece reminiscent of an oft-quoted "If you per chance meet Buddha on the road (to Damascus?), kill him!" Well, in the penultimate analysis (to quote, oh saddest, Annette), "Tall Paul he's my all" (@ volleyball!). H'H./H.e.m.

HaroHalola

16 years 10 months ago

barbsdad2003 - Would also

barbsdad2003 - Would also briefly attend here to the Poem's (spartan) structure; the 2 Line stanzas morphed as a 4 Line couplette (oxymoron?) are only further enhanced by L2 in each, which purposefully give movement, engaging the Reader to drop off the table, only to be happily re-lifted... Again, affinity, TY for this - H'H./H.e.m.

barbsdad2003

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you ...

for your look ... and comment. My email's out of order, possibly the fault of browser on this computer. I don't know. When I arrive back in Michigan and attend the local library for computer access, I'll then see if my email's in good health. I mention this because I've not been able to receive notices of attention paid to my posted pieces here. So I'm sure I've lost a few of them. Your comments revealed their presence on my dashboard, so was able to respond ... now, anyway. Yours, Chuck PS: Your pic seems Charlton Hestonish ... at least a bit. Striking.

HaroHalola

16 years 10 months ago

YW!

Well, I certainly am pleased you were able to facilitate, & empathize with the possibility of "lost attentions," however intentions remain extant, so, no rushes to judgement, although the prospect of the chiseled Heston does conjure bull-rush of Its accord; guess I'll just Mosey-on into the day, tho' feeling somewhat plagued, but It-too shall Pass... H'H/H.e.m.