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The Wave

 

The ripple on the horizon,
the imperceptible start.
The wave comes closer,
the wave reaches higher.

Now it’s upon him,
upon the tiny surfer.
High the wave reaches,
it towers over,
it gains a crown,
a boiling white crown,
and this great monster,
cold, cruel, curving,
picks up the surfer
and is smitten a blow,
a great white gash across its chest.
In attack the wave rears higher, higher,
higher still.
The surfer rides destruction safe to shoulder.

The wave curls over,
further, further.
Up the wave
Up the the wave the surfer strives,
striking at the waves great heart,
that roaring murderous great heart.
Along the wave,
back to the curl,
in the curl to strike the heart.
The surfer rides out,
unscathed but weary,
weary all through,
though his mind is alert.

Down the wave, another great gash,
up the wave,
beating, beating,
beating the wave
till it fights still harder.
Yet the wave seems conquered,
yet the wave seems smaller
and the surfer grows careless

and the fury unleashes!
It crushes the surfer,
it envelopes his board
and the surfer is no more,
and his board is but pieces,
pieces of rubble.

The crowd on the shore,
horrified,
petrified
at the sight of the surfer,
lost to the sea.



 


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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Mistyone

18 years 11 months ago

good write

I liked it you are a very good writer even at the age of 12
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

and you are a very good writer

that's why I posted this for you particularly. You will get lots of crit here but don't ever let it put you down. Take what you need and leave the rest and never let it change your voice. Believe it or not a stranger can believe in you. And I do.
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

you

wrote this when you were 12?! Bullpucky! It's f*cking masterpiece theater, I loved the first half of it. I was gonna say you repeated "the" but if you wrote it when you were 12 you probably already saw and intentionally left it in. Seriously I really enjoyed this. Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Many thanks!

It's true, I was 12 and wrote it alone after my sister introduced me to Judith Wright's works. I have left it unedited to see where I came from. cheers
Mark

Mark

18 years 3 months ago

Just alone working your way

. . . out through the waves to "that" wave is exausting for a beginner like me. Trying to "catch" "the" wave is another exausting workout. I can't even imagine what it would be like being up to speed to get to the heart of the monster. Wow! I could feel this, Jess. Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 1 month ago

I drowned in the experiencing of it,

fortunately it didn't take long for my short life to pass before my eyes. Then a surfer pulled me up by the hair, dumped me on the beach and said "stay out of the water you stupid little cunt", then kicked me. But he saved my life, cheers, Jess
Mark

Mark

18 years ago

Sounds like

Sounds kind of like the first time I was drinking with the "older guys" ROTF only they just laughed a lot and told me to keep walking :(---- I think you got better at it not sure about myself. Mark
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poewriter58

17 years 7 months ago

Jess

I did get to this poem as you can see. I believe a twelve year old did write this. Talent begins somewhere does is not and you only managed to improve on tha talent nicely done Jess Chrys
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 6 months ago

Jess,

Very Interesting that this was written at 12. It was a great beginning. thanks, Eddie
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

twelve

I was learning to waterski at twelve years and far away from the ocean. Closest I ever came actually was body surfing during yearly vacations to the Atlantic. (writing was not even a thought yet) Mark "some things change, some things do not"
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poewriter58

16 years 3 months ago

Jess

I just reread this piece. I found it just a wonderful as the first time. Even at that early age you had what it takes. I was nine when I wrote my first poem and now when I look back at it I find it was dreadful' but my heat was in it. Yours however I believe whenever it was written it will be a work that will stand on it's own and stand the test of time. Chrys
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Oooooooh 12, wicked write,

Oooooooh 12, wicked write, love the vision of an enthused kid scribbling away with his pencil, great visuals from this peice, have you seen dog town and the z boys?? vix ; )
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Monalisa

16 years 3 months ago

Very cool.

I love this too. It has heart and is brave. Thanks for directing me to it. Mona