My Son And I

I see him holding it all together
His desires intertwined with his tears
And he’s running scared and living in fear
Of feeling this way forever.
It’s hard to feel normal
When you feel so out of place.
I look at him and see my face.
People think we’re dry
But they don’t see the tears we cry
Or the days we have wasted
For fear of measuring up.
I don’t want him to waste forty years wondering
Like I did.
He is an amazingly gifted man.
He doesn’t need to keep it inside.
I wish he wouldn’t hide.
He is not alone.

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wolfycat

19 years ago

Thanks!!

Not trying to 'win' any awards. Just writing what is on my heart to write. Thanks!! I am here sharing. If it touches someone, then great. If it does not, then great!! Thanks.

Word

19 years ago

Please...

I despise the force rhymes: "dry/cry and inside/hide" It takes away from the meaning and beauty of this piece. "When you feel so out of place. I look at him and see my face." Would you object to using me instead of face seeing as how I dont think you are just talking about physically but you emotionally and overall internally. I loved this poem and you are extremely talented but ssome of these rhymes are elemtary and you could say what you are saying without them. The reflection and similarities you are able to see are beautiful in itself but.....(sorry I'm going on forever. These are just suggestions, I love the sentiment none the less) Thanks for the read Peace

wolfycat

19 years ago

Comments Appreciated

Thank you for your ideas and suggestions. A lot of what I have written is of the rhyme type. It is good to hear what you have to say and I never really thought about using 'me'. Thanks so much for your insight and ideas. Wolfy