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Lil ricky
Apr 28, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Streets

                             The Streets
The streets will makc and break you , but the strrets can also take you to a place u dont want to be. But for me that will be the day cause im telling all of you its going to be my way!! twist and trun is wat the streets will do run the streets dont let the streets run you!!!

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19 years ago

Hmm...

I liked the title however I had higher hopes. You need to add more. Simplicity is good however you need to add description, adjetives imagery etc. "The streets will make and break you"-how, what streets, the people. Harlem streets, South Bronx, Iraq streets?...is it metaphorical for something else. Elaborate and explain.The rhyme scheme sounded force. Right what you feel but make sure it flows. Good start, I love the concept. Thanks for the read Peace
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Lil ricky

19 years ago

thank u alot

thank u for telling me wat i need to add to my poem and im glad u still liked it even if it was not the best poem ever!!!!!!!!!!!!