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Sun Up and Sun Down

You crowded my mind
with thoughts of mystifying inquiry
which turned me on
see, you first started slow
moving your lips in a rhythmic flow
and asked
Who are you?
Moving on
You explained your view on abortion
Explained the resonance of scientific extortion
That baby killing was not justifiable
However the world we lived in made it necessary, a new way of protecting vanity and avoiding responsibility
And promised me
that we would never abort a baby we made out of love?.
Then you lead me into a world of Submission
Gently
a cry escaped from quivering lips which made
you Stop! immediately.
stared into my eyes
caressingly
told me that you could see the sun set and rise fluoresce
through lakes of brown shimmers
Smiles
Next you sat and held me
Took timid glances occasionally
You Fed me with passion through shallow breaths
That secreted a warm mist from your mouth, lightly hitting my chapped lips
Coonnnsumption
We rested in each others deafening silence and
heart swallowing grips of tenderness
shackled in each others love
Last night
I did not lose my virg in nity through sexual penetration,
but emotional security and intellectual stimulation
Not consecutive I love you’s?
But romance
The fire we have burns eternally creating linear embers wallowing in forever?Last Night
you and i
We,
made beautiful love
Through verbal romance

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Mark

Mark

19 years ago

This was very pleasing

Thanks, I read it two times and was held by it both times. I think the logic is very fine, the exotic way of presenting those few words slowed me down at first but I like the way you did that. For me this, as a very personal expression, is among the best I have seen. Thanks again!
W

Word

19 years ago

Thanks

I appreciate your honesty and thank you for commenting. Thanks, Peace
C

Conect11

18 years 12 months ago

Sun Up and Sun Down

I was most fascinated by the pragmatic beginning to this poem, Word. It builds up to a fiery, yet intellectual passion that I admit nearly lost me until I read it a second time. The concept is awesome: "Last night I did not lose my virginity through sexual penetration, but emotional security and intellectual stimulation Not consecutive I love you’s? But romance" Excellent writing!
L

lithium flower

18 years 10 months ago

that was beautiful

that was very beautiful, it was intimate but smart and well thought out. One of my best reads. looking forwards to read more.