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Michael F Vinning
Mar 04, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

ELUSIVITY

 

 

ELUSIVITY
by M Vinning

Happiness
Simple, Necessary
Easy like a Hug from your Dad

Happiness
Simply Complicated
Elusive like a Hug from you Dad

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Michael F Vinning

19 years 2 months ago

Good Piece

I must say mr. vinning, you've done an excellent job with this piece....very happy and bouncy in the first verse, then the home run with the second....not such a nice and happy world we live in after all, but you didn't have to get dark or shady to make that point...you stayed in the framework of the fairy tell....yet ended with the message of somewhat of a nightmare! Great contrast! Congrats!

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painbreedsart

18 years 10 months ago

Why hold back? The

Why hold back? The subtleness was too subtle, if that makes sense...I found myself wanting more, so if that was your intent you were successful:)
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painbreedsart

18 years 10 months ago

Why hold back? The

Why hold back? The subtleness was too subtle, if that makes sense...I found myself wanting more, so if that was your intent you were successful:)