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Clentin
Clentin
Sep 01, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

09/25 Running out of time

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Time's Up

Passing
Pulse now slowing
Heart beats diminishing
Family clears tears from their eyes
Times Up

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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whitetea

whitetea

7 months 3 weeks ago

Haunting. I love to read…

Haunting. I love to read first hand accounts of hospice workers to get an idea of the end of life and what it looks like from the outside. Well captured.

Rula

Rula

7 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Clentin

I thought this is a perfect example of a perfect cinquaine. 

Great job re the theme as well.

Thank you for sharing!

P.s. Did you mean  "Time's Up"

 

Lavender

Lavender

6 months 3 weeks ago

Time's Up

Hello, Clentin,

Pretty certain it's just me - I'm wondering if there may be a different way to state that the family is crying.   The imagery and action of "clears tears" and "time's up" together makes me a little uncertain if the grieving process might be over.  Again, probably just me...

I'll be back! Thank you!

L