Barbara Writes

May 31, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Upon The Starship Pheonix

I look upon the night skies
And a little star twinkle
Like a pixie in the sky

My lil sis Jeanette got her wings
Among the stars darting forth
From left to right she dances for me
Upon the starship Phoenix.

— Barbara Writes, May 31, 2022

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Remembering my lil sis

Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

scribbler

4 years ago

Hi Carolina girl

I get the feeling this is based on reality so you have my sympathy. I hope to see you around more

Barbara Writes

3 years 11 months ago

hi Stan

thanks for stopping by. just remembered my sister. She left us in 2020 at the height of covid, 1 months few days after my mother left.

One

4 years ago

Barbara

As Stan said it feels like reality in which case a critique is not applicable.

The shortness actually adds to the emotion. Just the right amount of depth & feeling to create the scene & atmosphere.

Well delivered,

One.

Barbara Writes

3 years 11 months ago

thanks One

It's nice to meet you. as I said to stan already I"m remembered her in writing it.

Candlewitch

4 years ago

dearest Barbara,

I agree with Stan and one, Geezer, too. I am so sorry for your loss.
but it is so very good to see you! I am chasing my own tail in happiness from your return!!!

*love, Cat

Barbara Writes

3 years 11 months ago

Thanks Cat

I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your kind sentiments

Geezer

4 years ago

Like Stan...

and one have said; It is good to see you again, even though the subject is one of sorrow. So sorry for your loss. ~ Geez.
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Barbara Writes

3 years 11 months ago

Thanks Geezer

I appreciate your sentiment. I will look for the Challenges Titles and do so