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Feb 12, 2021
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Leaves of life
I rest my weary head
against the earths
tender timber bed
Burnished by the
Blissful but yet bold
color of brown . Carrying
It’s colorful
coruscating
crown of the luscious
Leaves of life .
that once carried
the callow clean
Color of green
now hold the adept
colors of
orange and gold.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
5 years 2 months ago
A very colorful...
image in my mind! I like the way that you have blended and smoothed the sentences with the "B' and 'C' beginnings.
I don't know about the use of the word [adept], but it doesn't seem to hurt the overall scheme. Perhaps leaf it 'B'. ~ Geez.
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|Edward nigma
5 years 2 months ago
Thank you
Thank you for your opinion it is always a pleasure to hear from you
Lavender
5 years 2 months ago
Leaves of Life
Hello, Edward,
I feel as if I've traveled through the life of a leaf. Bold imagery within a subtle journey.
Thank you!
L
|Edward nigma
5 years 2 months ago
Thank you
Thank you for reading my inspiration for this was two songs by frank Sinatra I can read between the lines and autumn leaves.
Lavender
5 years 2 months ago
Aw...
Both very sad and lonely songs / lyrics. I've noticed you've been inspired by Frank Sinatra before. He was one of a kind.
Thank you,
L
|mddy
5 years 2 months ago
Dear Edward
Such a beautiful set of words! Powerful imagery aswell!
|Edward nigma
5 years 2 months ago
Thank you
Thank you
|Edward nigma
5 years 2 months ago
Thank you
I wanted to portray the journey of life or aging I usually compare life to other things like nature like leaves and birds .
Thank you for pleasant comment
|Edward nigma
5 years 2 months ago
Thank you
Thank you
Breakinglogic
5 years 2 months ago
Edward,
Edward,
This is some really interesting characterization. I think it is surprising to say that timber is tender; the way you put it, however, is oddly appropriate. Comfortable even, if I can say that. I like the way you compare the matured leaves to their "callow" beginnings while honoring both equally. Beautiful work
|Edward nigma
5 years 2 months ago
Thank you
Thank you for your kind opinion