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Feb 26, 2018
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This poem is part of the workshop:
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form
Sunku 16 Workshop “Summer's Ensemble”
Summer
Is popping
with nature buzz
animals
insects
ensemble chirps
arrived
summertime
Gaia’s Kingdom
— Barbara Writes, Feb 26, 2018
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
raj
8 years 3 months ago
Barbara
I will look out for the edits you make for which there is room..your Sunku inspired this
Beyond
the Spring
I hear a buzz
Beetles
chirping
summer songs
Others
join party
from their nests
......
Barbara Writes
8 years 3 months ago
Beautiful raj
I’m weird like that. It’s still spring and everything is drowsy about waking up but I hear them as if they are awake alive and buzzing all around.
raj
8 years 3 months ago
Stanza 3 could be
Stanza 3 could be
Soon
our tails swing
in boogie dance
....
Barbara Writes
8 years 3 months ago
Nice raj
I’m visualizing the ending as a Kingdom like the lion king movie but with the whole planet involved as a Kingdom
raj
8 years 3 months ago
Yep
That's what was the intended purpose in sync withe the "Ensemble" in your title
....
Barbara Writes
8 years 3 months ago
Yeah
Glad it worked
weirdelf
8 years 3 months ago
excellent
https://vocaroo.com/i/s10M1MgDzhAB
Barbara Writes
8 years 3 months ago
Thanks
I appreciate your visit as always