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Weekend Dad
It’s Saturday morning at Ronald McDonald’s,
a happy place where a red-haired clown holds sway
and kids find toys in every Happy Meal box.
It’s a happy place where we single fathers bring
our weekend kids to kick off two days of
compressed amusement, recreation and happiness.
My little girl and I sit and talk, between
bites of muffins and sips of hot chocolate,
about school, friends, pets … mommy and home.
I advise, cajole, console, praise and concur.
And if melancholia intrudes, I beat it back
into hiding with jokes and silliness.
“Oh, daddy, you’re so funny.”
When it’s time to go, I noogy her head and we’re off.
There are games to play, movies to see, treats to eat,
and happiness to sustain untll Sunday evening
when I bring her back to her full-time home and I
go back, alone, to mine.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I'm still struggling with free verse. Not sure if I get the technique. Anyway, here's an attempt based on a dark time in my life. That was many years ago. I'm a happy grandfather today, thank you very much.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Vivovon
9 years 8 months ago
Alone
A bit sad at the end. Life and society have become highly complex and sophisticated. At times, it is beyond my understanding. It is a lovely poem. Also, touching. I am a novice trying to learn about the poems. So I am not qualified to comment on the structure of the poem. But, I would say I like it. It flows and reads smooth.
DiPrima
9 years 8 months ago
Vivovon, Thanks
Appreciate your comments. Perhaps we can learn together.
Mike