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DiPrima
Member since May 31, 2016
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GOLDEN YEARS
Who first called these the golden years,
some bard still in his youth?
If he lived to be my golden age,
he’d know the woeful truth.
You get a slowness to your gait,
your memory’s not so great,
your ears start getting longer with each day.
You can’t chew, you can’t screw,
minor bumps turn black and blue.
and your hair gets grey and slowly goes away.
You lose strength and muscle mass
while adding inches to your ass,
and your belly starts to look a lot like Buddha’s.
Your skin gets thin and spotty,
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you barely make it to the potty
and your manly pecs turn into saggy boobs
Your eyes start getting squinty
they’re no longer twenty/twenty,
and your hearing leaves a lot to be desired.
Your joints get sore and achy
your balance somewhat shaky
‘cause your “good-to” date has long ago expired.
Sing praises of the Golden Years?
I think I’ll take a pass.
As for me the Golden Years
can kiss my senior …. my senior …
Did I mention memory loss?
DiPrima’s timeline
- May 2026
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31 SunAnniversary
10 years of membership
- May 2021
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31 MonAnniversary
5 years of membership
- May 2017
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31 WedAnniversary
One year of membership
- January 2017
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22 Sun
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21 SatReceived a critique
on GOLDEN YEARS from @jane210660
"Another witty, fun - but horribly accurate write. If I was being hugely technical and nit picky, I'd say the rhythm was off in one or two places, but I'm not feeling hugely technical or nit picky, so I'm not going to sa…" -
21 SatReceived a critique
on GOLDEN YEARS from @WonderWoods
"I can relate to this - every day. This was a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing." -
20 Fri
- August 2016
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24 Wed
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07 Sun
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07 Sun
- June 2016
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11 SatFirst critique offered
on "RUNNING WITH THE BULLS" by @Geremia
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03 FriFirst publication
THE PLUCKY DUCK
- May 2016
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31 TueJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 3 days later.
About Me
About me
I am a freelance writer wishing to try my hand at poetry. Haphazardly self taught. In need of critical ears and experienced tips. I need direction separating prose from poetry.
Advertising is my background. Started as a writer, retired as a supervisor, returned to copywriting as a freelancer.
Location: Atlanta, GA USA, USA
Favorite Poets
Tennyson
Poe
Keats
Longfellow
Elizabeth Bishop
Frost
Wilfred Owen
Many others ...
Recent Work
GOLDEN YEARS
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Beach Boy
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WOKE UP THIS MORNIN'
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DROP BY DROP
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ORLANDO
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Gym Blues
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THE PLUCKY DUCK
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Workshops
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| RHYME PATTERNS (let's begin) | (syllabus) | Splash Pool | Started 2021-02-24 | Concluded |