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May 17, 2016
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COWS AND BUTTERCUPS edit
COWS AND BUTTERCUPS
WEST VIRGINIA 1944
across a field velvet green,
with buttercups and roaming cows
framed in skies cerulean
two women, skirts past the knees.
white hair dancing in the breeze,
walked lazily arm in arm in quiet conversation.
rare moments these to tell what only women
need to share beyond the care of men
— Geremia, May 17, 2016
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jane210660
10 years ago
I can see it perfectly. Jx
I can see it perfectly. Jx
Geremia
10 years ago
And I remember it. Thank you
And I remember it. Thank you, Jane......'
joe
brittle light
10 years ago
a vivid scene that elicits a
a vivid scene that elicits a saga...in so few words
remarkable!
Geremia
10 years ago
there is still poetry in me
there is still poetry in me as the light grows ever dim.
lovedly
10 years ago
not still.... Joe
it's all poetry
only in you
u r wonderful
'''.....two women, skirts past the knees.
white hair dancing in the breeze,....
and
I saw two such women
kiss each other
as if the heavens thundered..
real smoooochh
what can men doooooooooooo
they only woooooo
Geremia
10 years ago
always an encouraging word.
always an encouraging word. Now if positive thinking could raise my dopamine level. Meds stopped working. Thanx
joe
Keith Logan
10 years ago
I like
this beautiful vignette. It's not easy to say much in so few words especially when they are as unpretentious as this.
Geremia
10 years ago
I am so glad this poem was
I am so glad this poem was read as all who commented understood it. Thank you, Keith,