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May 04, 2015
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If I could wrap my head around these things, I'd be a fly in a spider web
yup.
that's the whole poem.
— Kailashana2, May 04, 2015
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Rula
11 years 1 month ago
Hello Anna
Nice to see you posting here again. It makes my heart good to see the older friends.
I thought there is a good thought and a subtext here, but also thought it would have been better if you gave a shorter title and extended your thought a little bit more to give us, the readers a space to enjoy. Anyway I know you when you revolutionize even over yourself.
best regards to you.
weirdelf
11 years 1 month ago
You are a fly in the spider's web of your own causes
I've lost count.
They are all good causes though.
Kailashana2
11 years 1 month ago
Hi Rula, sometimes I turn
Hi Rula, sometimes I turn inside out, and my poems are askance.
Hi Jess. A woman's work is never done. lol.
weirdelf
11 years 1 month ago
True
Lysistrata was wrong. Lots of sex stops war.
emeka ozurumba
11 years 1 month ago
how?
baby fighters along the way,
weirdelf
11 years 1 month ago
wrong! Murderer!
Babies live to continue the evolutionary line.
Esker
11 years 1 month ago
Always the artist...
Bravo my Dear!!!!!!!
bravo..
(mr Wolf)
Seren
11 years 1 month ago
the essence of you right
the essence of you right there in that one sentence
love xox
raj
11 years 1 month ago
Hi Anna
would be nice if after a while you let us know the essence of this write by decoding the abstract...till then you have me guessing...