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Sep 12, 2014
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You have the expert hands of a concert pianist
and I want you to play up and down me
like the ivory keys of a baby grand.
Lightly.
Ever so lightly.
Feeling, learning every part of me.
And then growing in intensity.
Urgency.
Until reaching culmination.
Fill me with your music.
— AnnaNJ, Sep 12, 2014
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alidzain
11 years 10 months ago
Hi Anna
can tell me more about this poem? I think "Request" will be a better title for this poem but it is up to you. your call. On the whole, its a good write.
Alid
raj
11 years 10 months ago
Hi Anna
Analogy of Piano keys used very effectively for a very sensuous and stimulating sequence without being too loud and not at all amorous. If you are searching for a suitable title do let me know,. In the mean time I will try to figure out something.
Regards,
Ian.T
11 years 10 months ago
Anna
Now you must listen to the ABBA song "Andante" it is as your poem lol.
One of theirs I love it is written with feelings as your piece,
Yours Ian.T
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