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May 20, 2013
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WHO AM I ? UPDATED
WHO AM I?
I am a complicated
and complex entity
the vessel of a million genes\
and more
the sum total of all humanity
is in me
and in others before.
I anguish over the mystery
of my being
for the beginning
may be clear
but my ending I
s what most I fear.
I've seen them pass
one by one
ten little Indians
and soon none
No word from the other side
if another side is my destiny
no signs that I see
echoes of a hollow voice
empty spaces of stillness
a soul wandering
in the wilderness
inevitability of no choice.
— Geremia, May 20, 2013
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eightmenout
13 years 2 months ago
Great subject
Very well articulated. But I would have liked a little more structure with the meter and rhyme.
thanks for the read,
Scott
Geremia
13 years 2 months ago
I'll work om it, thanks.
I'll work om it, thanks.
eightmenout
13 years 2 months ago
nice revisions
Flows a lot better.
Geremia
13 years 2 months ago
:)
:)
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