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May 20, 2013
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WHO AM I ? UPDATED
WHO AM I?
I am a complicated
and complex entity
the vessel of a million genes\
and more
the sum total of all humanity
is in me
and in others before.
I anguish over the mystery
of my being
for the beginning
may be clear
but my ending I
s what most I fear.
I've seen them pass
one by one
ten little Indians
and soon none
No word from the other side
if another side is my destiny
no signs that I see
echoes of a hollow voice
empty spaces of stillness
a soul wandering
in the wilderness
inevitability of no choice.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
eightmenout
12 years 11 months ago
Great subject
Very well articulated. But I would have liked a little more structure with the meter and rhyme.
thanks for the read,
Scott
Geremia
12 years 11 months ago
I'll work om it, thanks.
I'll work om it, thanks.
eightmenout
12 years 11 months ago
nice revisions
Flows a lot better.
Geremia
12 years 11 months ago
:)
:)