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Feb 18, 2013
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Impressionable
Impressionable young women
encouraged to enter a trade
that oft belittles and degrades
detrimental to mental health
not worth the short-term wealth
people have become inured
forget the pain often endured
reality becomes obscured
to enter a life of vice
women can feel they have no choice
no other way they recognise
fed by their dealers lies
I always picture it seedy
making a living from the needy
pimps are just plain greedy
big men, in fact, weedy
I’m told its consensual
to me thats nonsensical
is it anyway factual
maybe ‘John’s’ whimsical
— sueb, Feb 18, 2013
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Critiques
Ian.T
13 years 3 months ago
Sue
I would love to see this expanded a little and put into stanzas, there is a story here to be told and it is ready, Yours Ian.T
sueb
13 years 3 months ago
Thanks Ian T x
Thanks Ian T x