untitled light

the moon fills with light
silver ribbons beam on down
Earth lowers her eyes

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Comments

Rula

12 years 10 months ago

I find difficulty in

"On down " a bit confusing but may be it is only me.

Seren

12 years 10 months ago

hi Rula

Light beams from the moon and on down to earth ... That's the way I mean
It maybe a language thing ? I'm sure its not just me me lol we say come on down

Thanks for the read and comment

Regards Jc x

sueb

12 years 10 months ago

lovely

Seren

12 years 10 months ago

Thank you very much Sue !

Jc ~