jzarmel

Member since July 28, 2009

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Trapped

Posted Dec 22, 2016 · 9 lines · 1 critiques

It seems I can't find freedom from doubt
This clings and impedes some of my clout
The rest is at war with a regime of self-pity
Flanking my self-esteem with regret; empathy
Frets with an obscene gesture of disrespect
As if I hadn't shown simplicity to direct
It to safety instead like myself it stayed to adapt
To the only opinion that weans on the fact
That I'm trapped......

jzarmel’s timeline

July 2024
27 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
July 2019
27 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
March 2017
18 Sat

Received a critique
on Trapped from @swamp-witch
"I suffer from depression so this poem feels very familiar to me. This type of poem is called a lyric poem (learn more here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lyric_poetry) and I think you've done a good job to represent dep…"
December 2016
22 Thu

Posted a poem
Trapped
"It seems I can't find freedom from doubt"
Open thread 9 lines
16 Fri

Received a critique
on Neutral Ground from @Esker
"hockey....coaches...trainers..stars... i never played....bad bad asthma like I could have died type.. no sports..no gleeful smashing into the boards fights....winning shot.. puck handling...high sticking! sitting on the…"
14 Wed

Received a critique
on Neutral Ground from @chevyvent
"Very impressive piece put together very well Strikes to the heart with many emotions Keep up the good work"
13 Tue

Received a critique
on Neutral Ground from @weirdelf
"line 4 did you mean mourns? Smacks a little bit of (dare I say?) "To be or not to be". I understand your dilemma thoroughly but as Confucious say "Man who sits on fence gets splinters in bum" Perhaps you could do some t…"
13 Tue

Posted a poem
Neutral Ground
"To stop feeling resentful toward someone for an offense,"
Open thread 9 lines
09 Fri

Received a critique
on Respect/Love from @weirdelf
"This could have sounded plaintiff and weak, instead, because of the prosodic qualities it read as a strong human need. My best comment is to offer you my reading. https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/respect-love-by-jzarmel"
08 Thu

Posted a poem
Respect/Love
"I'm looking for a feeling of deep admiration;"
Open thread 10 lines
October 2016
27 Thu

Received a critique
on Complexity from @Esker
"but then Im clever and high minded (tested my IQ and Im quite high) love the use of the word Omniscient and the dinger.. I'm ego driven! if we had no ego per say.. India would have no Ghandi for it was the snub to his p…"
24 Mon

Received a critique
on Masculinity from @Candlewitch
"glad to have helped! :) always, Cat"
24 Mon

Received a critique
on Masculinity from @Candlewitch
"The feeling of powerlessness turns good men bad over compensating cowardice with physical strength they've never had beware of those similar or is saying so too linear for those with love turned foul this is just a sugg…"
23 Sun

Posted a poem
Complexity
"I dabble into the void"
Open thread 5 lines
19 Wed

Posted a poem
Masculinity
"The feeling of powerlessness"
Open thread 8 lines
September 2016
26 Mon

Posted a poem
Politics
"I guess I'm running a fever"
Open thread 14 lines
July 2016
10 Sun

Posted a poem
My Reality
"Lost in my mind state"
Open thread 13 lines
02 Sat

Posted a poem
Live and Let Die
"So many against one another."
Open thread 5 lines
June 2016
16 Thu

Posted a poem
Luxurious Peace
"Only peace sign is on a foreign car"
Open thread 21 lines
14 Tue

Critiqued
"BARREN" by @Geremia
"an excellent description of the word barren. nice write."
08 Wed

Posted a poem
Forgive me
"I get lost in your eyes;"
Open thread 10 lines
May 2016
31 Tue

Posted a poem
F.E.A.R
"It's all because of fear......"
Open thread 22 lines
29 Sun

Posted a poem
Something Borrowed
"You give me your opinion on life."
Open thread 22 lines
28 Sat

Most-discussed work
I.A.P.

10 critiques to date.
15 Sun

Highest posting month
May 2016 — 5 poems
July 2014
27 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
February 2013
20 Wed

Critiqued
"how dare you?" by @sunscreen
"I like the write. Descriptive in every way concerning heartache."
16 Sat

Critiqued
"Child love" by @Frenchf
"I can't help but to respect what I call the true potencial of the heart displayed in the poem. I can feel the pain, deeply, in every line. The truth hurts, full force. Loved it."
16 Sat

First critique offered
on "Child love" by @Frenchf
July 2010
27 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
July 2009
27 Mon

First publication
The Recipe
27 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.