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godshouldnthave
Member since May 13, 2011
Member for 15 years
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The Cut Off
Here us now all ye
Sandbaggers,
Coattail sniffers,
and Plagiarizers
We be on to ye
Copy/Pasters
Re-arrangers
and Content Takers.
Lazily daily you barrage
with trite questions and ponders.
Unwilling yourself to forage
for the attained wisdom of others.
Vocally promising goals
of soon reciprocated giving.
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Yet never stepping soles
to our path of earning this living.
Sore from heaving your weight
up and down flights of our success.
As you siphon off and imitate
fruits that blossom upon the best.
Get in the right lane
my tame mind sloth.
NO, Further over!
Remove your brain
from our plane of thought.
NO, Further under!
Never yet have we severed ties
with angry goodbyes,
But a forged promise river lies
to unremembered lives.
For you no more
can we harbor anguish.
A whisper roar
in every man’s language.
Shell screaming raid
of flailing liberation.
We burn the pity paved
bridge to our salvation.
godshouldnthave’s timeline
- May 2026
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13 WedAnniversary
15 years of membership
- May 2021
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13 ThuAnniversary
10 years of membership
- September 2020
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04 FriReceived a critique
on The Cut Off from @Geezer
"rip it off, when you offer it up? Nay, say I, it is an enigma, yet to be fathomed. I am reminded of the old saw: "There is nothing new under the sun". We just re-arrange it to our liking. ~ Geez. ." -
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- August 2020
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22 SatReceived a critique
on Pretty Okay from @Geezer
"this to be haunted by so many thoughts of inadquacies, that I thought maybe it was just a foolish write and didn't deserve a comment. However, after reading it numerous imes, I began to see; that there is much more to i…" -
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- May 2016
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13 FriAnniversary
5 years of membership
- December 2013
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20 FriReceived a critique
on Teach. Teach your Parents well. from @scribbler
"Just time for a quick once over. I like the rhyme pattern which allowed more freedom of expression. I usually don't like repetitive line beginnings but it actually works here. I didn't have time to deduce the vague (at…" - April 2013
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- March 2013
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- November 2012
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16 Fri
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05 MonFirst publication
Regretfully Yours
- May 2012
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13 SunAnniversary
One year of membership
- May 2011
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13 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 542 days later.
About Me
About me
I came to NeoPoet about a decade ago. I was an accomplished visual artist yet I knew and still know nothing about poetry. I was under the impression that it was a great place to question morality, inspire the youth, practice self-inquiry, and to explore structures of words that had not previously been combined. I was wrong. It is a place with rules. Follow those rules and people will give you verbose "likes" and pat you on the head. I came here looking to improve my mind's trajectory in the world. This was met with overwhelming opposition. I left 7 years ago and decided to teach myself the piano and how to compose music. There in the vibrations of my own melodies I found peace. No longer disillusioned with the notion that my elders could learn from me as much as I could learn from them. But through my songs I have had a tiny tiny bit of success. Success is making people feel emotions beyond their own words and far beyond ego. Now I return to NeoPoet. I do not care what I get out of it. Surprise me. www.foolishmale.com
Location: West Coast North America
Recent Work
The Cut Off
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Pretty Okay
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much argue about nothing.
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Needle Man.
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Replace my Pounds with Fucks
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Demoneyes Me
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Teach. Teach your Parents well.
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Victory at Hand
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Regretfully Yours
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Workshops
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| Show And Tell: Intensive Critique Workshop | (syllabus) | Shark Pool | Started 2013-02-28 | Concluded |