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Gneelies
Member since September 7, 2024
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Winter Crow
The snow fell fresh upon the field
And like the siren's song it pled,
"Come, let's us spend this pensive hour
Together as your Spirit's led!"
Then like a spectre cold I breathed
And slaked my way alone
To weigh the measure of a life
Among the birches, pines, and bone.
And, leaning, set my ear to hear,
Amidst the winter's silent dearth,
The crackle of the corn-fed crow
Upon his pine-tipped tower perched.
His plumes the hue of midnight death
And breast and back of black
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And in his darkness graced the sky
With all his sacred silhouette.
Lone sentinel of barren field
Wherein the farmer sows each row...
"One for the pigeon and one for the crow
One to rot and one to grow!"
He must have marked the crumping snow
And snapling of the twigs in thaw.
And signalled to his murder friends
Some stark alert and warning caw!
Generous omen he of death;
And calamity his augur!
To set ones face upon this doom
Is to be both king and pauper.
In silence, then, I turned and saw
My feral life revealed in woe
And I with debt obliged to pay
This venerate prophet winter Crow!
Gneelies’s timeline
- September 2025
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07 SunAnniversary
One year of membership
- April 2025
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08 TueReceived a critique
on Winter Crow from @Alex Tanner
"I enjoyed this immensely. I would have ditched several unnecessary conjunctions which would, I think, have helped the rhyme and flow. Whenever I read about crows I cannot but help think of Randall Flag. Alex." -
07 MonReceived a critique
on Winter Crow from @RoseBlack
"This was well done. Crows and ravens are my favorite birds. I thought the word choice was intriguing, a few I hadn't heard before but felt it fit the theme and feel of the poem nicely. Well done" -
07 MonReceived a critique
on Winter Crow from @Candlewitch
"I feel that the rhythm varied from verse to verse, which feels a bit off. Even so, I did enjoy this poem because of the colorful and inspired imagery. Especially enjoyed thees lines: In silence, then, I turned and saw M…" -
06 SunReceived a critique
on Winter Crow from @Geezer
"to look up a couple of words, I spent more time puzzling over them, than I did enjoying the poem. I think that there are words that are simpler and still suited for the task. All in all, a good poem, but... I will now a…" -
06 Sun
- September 2024
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12 ThuNew follower
@Candlewitch
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11 WedReceived a critique
on Quiet Walk from @Candlewitch
"I liked your poem very much, but in these two lines I believe that you could lose the word (And) as it is unnecessary: (And) we went along to start (And) found all things new again. (maybe use We instead of And here) th…" -
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08 SunReceived a critique
on Lonely Man from @Geezer
"I like this. Fun to read, it moved quickly and with very good rhyme. I could have sat down with a cup of coffee and a cookie to read a bunch of this story. Nice job. ~ Geezer. ." -
08 SunReceived a critique
on Lonely Man from @Candlewitch
"I see you have confused the AI brain...a difficult thing to do, lol! Most of the time AI confuses me! these are my favorite lines of your poem: I looked long for him, his never die And found him in the wind’s dark sigh…" -
07 SatFirst publication
Lonely Man
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About Me
About me
Retired philosophy and theology professor who wants to devote himself to sauntering, writing poetry, and enjoying evening's golden hour.
Location: Northeast USA
Favorite Poets
Alfred Lord Tennyson
John Keats
William Wordsworth
Henry Wadsworth Longfellow
Matthew Arnold
Ralph Waldo Emerson
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