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Member since December 9, 2014
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The Wait
A horse-pulled cart
Through central park
Or opening night on Broadway
Just tell me
Where you want to go
Which one will make your heart sway
Shall we go dance
Where the bubbly flows
With music all night long
Or be entranced
By a firefly's glow
Ephemeral yet so strong
A movie perhaps
You want to see
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Action Sci-fi or comedy
Choose from these 3
No sappy Romance
You know that is just not for me
Shall we go feast
Just down the street
Where the food fair's got some tasty treats
Or should we try
That new place nearby
The one that serves delectable Thai
Hair all gelled up
His sleeves rolled up
A chill now made him shiver
Just tell me now
Don't make me late
Atleast try to be quicker
'A coat' he thought
With a hood perhaps
I should wear something thicker
You know how much
I hate to wait
He yelled with a slight lip quiver
But no reply
He let out a sigh
Why won't you give an answer
Fine then don't come
I will go alone
And douse my lousy liver
Just then his father
Entered the room
And asked 'What's all this pother'
His eyes teared up
As he gave up
And walked away 'Don't bother'
Don't leave my boy
Just talk to me
I worry for you Trevor
She's dead my son
How long will you
Keep talking to her mirror
eliminist’s timeline
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09 MonAnniversary
10 years of membership
- December 2019
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5 years of membership
- December 2015
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09 WedAnniversary
One year of membership
- October 2015
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15 ThuCritiqued
"Sometimes" by @ThEdges
"Sometimes life takes our breath away Sometimes it just leaves us panting Can feel the emotion and helplessness in this one - cheers" -
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14 WedReceived a critique
on The Wait from @Roscoe Lane
"I like this, well constructed and a good though sad subject. Regards Roscoe...." -
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02 FriReceived a critique
on The Kerchief from @raj
"There is one more "sown" at the end of line 4 in concluding stanza. Not being critical, kust bringing it to your attention Hindi version of course is very rich as expected from Gulzar .." -
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02 FriReceived a critique
on The Kerchief from @Sparrow
"I do apologise I was under the impression that it was a work by Gulzar and that you had just translated it. Being that it is totally your work you did an excellent job. I look forward to your next pieces and your partak…" -
01 ThuReceived a critique
on The Kerchief from @raj
"I can relate to your poem...did you mean sewn instead of sown?" - September 2015
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28 MonCritiqued
"dead air" by @Simon Smythe
"Was transported to an immigration queue, drenched in anxiety just by reading this - nicely done Sir" -
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12 ThuCritiqued
"Fate" by @eightmenout
"Brilliantly composed - cheers....hope the coming days aren't unkind to u..." -
12 ThuFirst critique offered
on "Fate" by @eightmenout
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- December 2014
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09 TueFirst publication
Colors
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09 TueJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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A rural soul meandering in an urban shell....
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The Tree (September Contest)
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Percussive Dance
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The Charlatan
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Glitch
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Dreamdoor
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Colors
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