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Dramen85
Member since June 18, 2020
Member for 5 years, 11 months
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Son of the Moon
Striving in the presence of the moon.
Whilst its light fades too soon.
Clocks atop the tower strike,
getting all passengers out within the hour.
So subtle the blueish white hue,
glimmers through.
A baby crawls through the night.
Seeking what never was because,
the old man and moon have no room.
Nor can they be bribed or exhumed.
Many presume however;
tears that are shed cause flooded plains;
but stopped by soot and dust-
from crowded lanes.
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Levies give in and-
the filthy fowl fly away cackling,
we’ll die again another day.
Peering through a window,
A family dines together.
Tender words heard;
love exchanged affectionately.
Never shared with the stranger.
Infection creeps within the veins of-
the boy who stands outside aloof.
All the while,
looking back at the moon.
Next chapter, a few words please.
Maybe laughter, to put minds at ease.
At least to bed, but could someone-
drown the elephant in the room.
To make this relevant,
the matter at hand, prevalent.
Inside his shell shaped like a cell.
But hey; who cares these days?
If the seeds are misplaced,
swept up by a broom.
All the while,
dying in the presence of the moon.
Dramen85’s timeline
- June 2025
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18 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
- June 2021
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18 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- August 2020
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20 ThuReceived a critique
on Son of the Moon from @pleiades
"This is a cathartic write of some kind, yes? That's what I get from it. This stanza: "Peering through a window a family dines together Tender words heard; love exchanged affectionately...", and so on until the end... Qu…" -
19 WedReceived a critique
on Son of the Moon from @c lynn brooks
"Very deep writing that only the author could understand what is behind it you are your father's son and are following in his footsteps" -
19 Wed
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07 FriReceived a critique
on Love's Elixir from @Candlewitch
"the whole poem is just breath taking! every line has perfect clarity. she is a lucky lady, for certain! fantastic work! always, Cat" - July 2020
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16 ThuReceived a critique
on Love's Elixir from @Geezer
"the love just dripping from every branch here; and I can understand the reluctance to include it in the category of stuctured western. However, it is a variety of structure and western. The structure is in the obvious r…" -
15 WedReceived a critique
on Love's Elixir from @raj
"Good change in title...nice photo of you two ... wish you both a long journey full of love... be well.." -
15 WedCritiqued
"Why My Poetry Sucks (Title prompt)" by @Lindame
"For me when I write a poem I eventually hear a rhythm in my head for it. Once I do, I find words to attach to the beats. I tend to write longer poems, and that's probably why. Every poet is different though, my dad and…" -
14 TueReceived a critique
on Love's Elixir from @Lavender
"Hello, Dramen, Even though you have selected free verse, there does seem to be a structure here, maybe just a bit loose. Very tender. Sometimes I find a poem within a poem: As a moonlit ocean crashes its waves, my heart…" -
14 TueReceived a critique
on Love's Elixir from @c lynn brooks
"beautifully written. A poem this fine deserves a stronger title give it a try your Dad was a fine man and I see you follow in his footsteps" -
14 TueReceived a critique
on Love's Elixir from @raj
"you have used great imagination while comparing various stages of your craving for your Love with other natural forms...i liked it immensely... thanks for the treat.... ." -
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06 MonCritiqued
"Why My Poetry Sucks (Title prompt)" by @Lindame
"I like this poem a lot. Your words are like precision gears rolling together perfectly. It feels like there could be more lines in there somewhere. Try stretching the rhythm of your poem further and see what happens. Da…" -
06 MonFirst critique offered
on "Why My Poetry Sucks (Title prompt)" by @Lindame
- June 2020
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18 ThuFirst publication
When Wings Fail
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18 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
My dad Richard Robichaud used to work here. I thought I would join and see how I can help. I also write fiction novels, short stories, novellas, songs along with poetry. In the past, I've published two novels. Currently I am working on a third, its about the origin of vampires.
Location: United States, USA
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Son of the Moon
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Love's Elixir
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Facing the Grave
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I Miss You
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When Wings Fail
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