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Whiskey and Ink
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Elizabeth
I come from humble beginnings,
beatings, slammed doors,
broken China, battered ribs.
I am the spitting image
of a cruel man.
My closest friend,
a cheap lighter.
My most intimate act,
a cigarette pressed softly
on my lips.
I pour whiskey on everything,
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just like he did.
Elizabeth, why are you here?
You lead me into a diner.
Why do you stay?
We drink coffee.
You tell me you love the simple things.
You talk about work
and the things you hope to do.
I drink my coffee.
You love how I listen.
I am a liar.
I am rotten.
Yet, you smile at me behind your porcelain mug.
Auburn hair, pale skin, cherry lips.
You're fragile.
I'm a selfish bastard.
I wear cologne to hide the alcohol.
I don't smile.
It shows my crooked grin.
Elizabeth,
I am a lie my disguise wears
so perfectly.
Whiskey and Ink’s timeline
- June 2026
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18 ThuReceived a critique
on Elizabeth from @DSCHREIB77
"Hi David. I dont have a critique here. I just like this. It's rare for me to find some brutal honesty and witty nuance. So much seems wasted on flowery language instead of relatable truth and images. This passage is gol…" -
17 WedReceived a critique
on Elizabeth from @BlueSkies
"This poem has so much depth to it. There is a wonderful contrast between the gentle presence of Elizabeth and the self-condemnation. Like you don't believe you deserve such kindness from another human, yet she sees you…" -
17 WedCritiqued
"Canvas" by @J-poe1234
"This is pretty solid for a first draft. I imagine you're telling us about a ghost that isn't ready to depart for the afterlife and is maybe wrestling with all these emotions he feels—represented by the different colors…" -
17 WedCritiqued
"Teatime With The Moon" by @wisecrone2011
"I understand your poem, or rather the feeling behind it. I admire they way you can use imagery without straying away from the core emotion/ themes of the poem (something I struggle with). 1. critique: where you placed y…" -
17 WedFirst critique offered
on "Teatime With The Moon" by @wisecrone2011
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17 WedFirst publication
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