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Carrie Marie
Member since October 13, 2022
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Two hearts
Two hearts that beat as one.
Come together under the fire of the sun.
One of them night the other day, in the mist of life somehow lost their way.
Both souls fighting in this world alone, only to realize they were never on their own.
The hurt they have endured will only for a little while last, until one day they must leave all that in the past
They both hold on when no one else is on their side. Into the moonlight that is their only guide.
Carrie Marie’s timeline
- October 2023
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13 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- October 2022
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14 FriReceived a critique
on Two hearts from @Jackweb
"I emphatically agree with the notion of the two gentle men. Punctuations assists in organizing your words into discernible verses. Nice job Carrie! ." -
14 FriReceived a critique
on Two hearts from @Rosewood Apothecary
"Excellent poem. I agree with Geezer that some slight reformatting could make for an easier read. I’m with him on corrections, there really aren’t any. It’s importing poetry to put line breaks where you want the reader t…" -
13 ThuReceived a critique
on Two hearts from @Lavender
"Greetings, Carrie Marie! The devotion of two struggling hearts - very nice! I agree with Geezer regarding the line breaks, separating at the commas or thoughts, as you did in the first two lines of your poem. It may mak…" -
13 ThuReceived a critique
on Two hearts from @Geezer
"and the end of this piece are fine. I do think that in order to make this more readable, you might break the lines into two separate lines at the commas. You have chosen to write every line rhyme, which I think is somew…" -
13 ThuFirst publication
Two hearts
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13 ThuJoined Neopoet
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I am a wife and a mother of 4 wonderful children.
Location: USA
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