captjack

Member since August 10, 2012

Member for 13 years, 9 months

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39 Poems

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Midnight Mission

Posted Apr 30, 2015 · 15 lines · 3 critiques

The bathroom quest in the wee hours
not to be taken lightly.
No lights please!
An attempt to preserve what’s
left of my retinas.

I feel my way out of bed and along the walls to
that porcelain oasis in the night.
Then "Eureka" and a sigh of relief.
Mission accomplished!

Dry feet an indication of accuracy within
a qualifying standard.
But daylight inspection will be
the better judge of marksmanship.
And now to retrace those careful
steps to that waiting bed

captjack’s timeline

August 2022
10 Wed

Anniversary
10 years of membership
August 2017
10 Thu

Anniversary
5 years of membership
May 2015
02 Sat

Received a critique
on Midnight Mission from @emeka ozurumba
"you know that word beauty is ban, or hated in some places, so I'll give this more than beauty , let me say inanimate, is this not beauties forlorn name --to come?"
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Midnight Mission from @raj
"a fun write for sure ..making the reader walk the way to & fro..."
April 2015
30 Thu

Received a critique
on Midnight Mission from @judyanne
"Lol - except for the missing the porcelain bit..... Definitely the no lights thing - I actually keep my eyes closed :) So annoying that increased need for the bathroom in the middle of the night as we get old lol a fun…"
30 Thu

Received a critique
on Dead Lover’s Lament from @judyanne
"Nothing to suggest - but I agree with eph there - horrid flows slightly better. I really like this write - it could be just the mood I'm in atm lol... but it touched my heart love judy xxx"
30 Thu

Posted a poem
Midnight Mission
"The bathroom quest in the wee hours"
Open thread 15 lines
November 2014
28 Fri

Received a critique
on Infectious from @lovedly
"just upgrading less than two comments so old a lovely poem unread heaven has now me loved sent"
26 Wed

Received a critique
on Summer’s Defiance from @weirdelf
"it doesn't take much to make a poem quite different, eh."
21 Fri

Received a critique
on Friends Just Resting from @Rula
"unlike what Ian thinks, I thought this is a complete thought. What I understand is that you demeen yourself. They are many but you are only "one" But don't forget that you are one of many to them too. I like how each in…"
12 Wed

Received a critique
on A Fast Food Day from @weirdelf
"I genuinely laughed out loud. Poetry like this is why we should all be rich, or at least making a living. Entertainment and content. What the fuck more do people want? Oh yes, that's it, an attention span of more than s…"
01 Sat

Posted a poem
Dead Lover’s Lament
"If you should look for me one day"
Open thread 36 lines
October 2014
31 Fri

Posted a poem
A Fast Food Day
"Regulars lined up for a"
Open thread 18 lines
May 2014
26 Mon

Posted a poem
Friends Just Resting
"Laying down in this field just resting."
Open thread 9 lines
April 2014
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Infectious
"I love the bubbles of her smile."
Open thread 8 lines
07 Mon

Posted a poem
A Father’s Daughter
"You can’t do this and you shouldn’t do that."
Open thread 12 lines
March 2014
27 Thu

Posted a poem
Old Cards and Memories
"In reading through a stack of old birthday, anniversary and"
Open thread 10 lines
February 2014
20 Thu

Posted a poem
Skipping Stones
"A casual walk along a rivers edge abandoned,"
Open thread 22 lines
15 Sat

Posted a poem
Take The Trip?
"My train has already left the station, but"
Open thread 12 lines
January 2014
13 Mon

Posted a poem
Flame
"The flame upon a candle sits,"
Open thread 16 lines
10 Fri

Posted a poem
Written
"Written on my heart forever is your name."
Open thread 13 lines
November 2013
16 Sat

New follower
@lonlyhrtsclub13
14 Thu

Posted a poem
The Household Cat
"Some thoughts about the household cat,"
Open thread 24 lines
August 2013
10 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
June 2013
30 Sun

Critiqued
"SPRING FEVER (final version relativity shop)" by @scribbler
"Love it. Can relate to every word. Takes me back down to S. FLA. But it fits just about anywhere spring is paying a visit. I like it very much. The only thing missing is the buzzing of tree frogs but if you listen hard…"
December 2012
19 Wed

Critiqued
"COLD DAY DESTINATION" by @scribbler
"Love it. Don't usually comment - just read, learn and enjoy. I can learn a lot from this one and find myself in tune with every word. Gerry"
19 Wed

First critique offered
on "COLD DAY DESTINATION" by @scribbler
August 2012
10 Fri

First publication
Shaggy Brown Teddy Bear (since unpublished)
10 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

Retired. Have been writing poetry or my version there of, on and off for the past 40 odd years. I had a few pieces published in the Literary Magazine of St. Thomas University in Miami in 1989. That was the extent of my putting anything out in public until now.

Location: NW Georgia (Fairmount) by way of South and North FLA, USA

Favorite Poets

Robert Frost

T. S. Eliot

William Carlos Williams

Carl Sandburg and Ezra Pound. I like these the best but really enjoy many many others like Whitman

Emerson

Whittier and Longfellow.

Contest Wins

This member has not yet won any contests.

Workshops

		Skill level:
"The Right Word"	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool	Started 2014-11-18	Concluded

Followed By

lonlyhrtsclub13

10 years of membership

5 years of membership

on Midnight Mission from @emeka ozurumba

on Midnight Mission from @raj

on Midnight Mission from @judyanne

on Dead Lover’s Lament from @judyanne

on Infectious from @lovedly

on Summer’s Defiance from @weirdelf

on Friends Just Resting from @Rula

on A Fast Food Day from @weirdelf

One year of membership

"SPRING FEVER (final version relativity shop)" by @scribbler

"COLD DAY DESTINATION" by @scribbler

on "COLD DAY DESTINATION" by @scribbler

Shaggy Brown Teddy Bear (since unpublished)

Membership begins

About Me

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Contest Wins

Workshops

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