BrokenShards

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Apology

Posted Mar 18, 2013 · 20 lines · 1 critiques

I didn’t mean to hurt you
I swear upon my heart
When he asked if he could walk me home
I knew I wasn’t being smart
He put his arm around me
He started playing with my hair
I told him I had a boyfriend
He told me he didn’t care
You can’t turn back the clock
You can’t go back in time
He was older and so was I
The chance for love had passed us by
There are times I wish I could turn back
Things are so different now

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And I want to be the girl I was
But I don’t remember how
So this is the girl you’re stuck with
Fragile and afraid
Pretending to be happy
But it’s all a big charade

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March 2013
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Received a critique
on Apology from @Frenchf
"In your poem for all the wrong you did. Well expressed"
18 Mon

Posted a poem
Apology
"I didn’t mean to hurt you"
Open thread 20 lines
15 Fri

Highest posting month
March 2013 — 8 poems
11 Mon

Received a critique
on The Lump In My Throat from @Frenchf
"Some people would not accept the truth. hope this is not a real situation"
11 Mon

Received a critique
on The Lump In My Throat from @Rula
"and it is always hard not to find someone to trust. reads like a child abuse , ."
10 Sun

Posted a poem
The Lump In My Throat
"Tonight for the first time I told them."
Open thread 12 lines
09 Sat

Received a critique
on Dangerous Game from @Frenchf
"Of being lied to or not knowing. And being sure of your unsure ness"
07 Thu

Posted a poem
Dangerous Game
"I am a powerless pawn"
Open thread 24 lines
06 Wed

Received a critique
on Prayer of An Unwed Mother from @Ian.T
"Your reply gave me the picture of lots of little animals waiting in line to buy diamond rings at the jewellers, the owl and the pussy cat could be told where to purchase a ring for their wedding as that damn pig has bee…"
06 Wed

Received a critique
on Prayer of An Unwed Mother from @Esker
"been on the road and met those still had their kids lost them or never got the years taken away back...Still had hope some of them..Hang your hopes on a star an Hour the dawn the peace of the walls cutting out the vast…"
06 Wed

Received a critique
on Dark Knight from @Esker
""A question all I once believed despising all this suffering I shall never wont to leave..." ... This is just my working of your poetry In no way am I telling you to change your work this is just my Workings of your cre…"
05 Tue

Received a critique
on Dark Knight from @Frenchf
"But interestingly I felt there was more substance if you ended without the last four lines which detracted from the poem It ends naturally at the words "broken heart can fix""
05 Tue

Posted a poem
Dark Knight
"I used to believe that love"
Open thread 20 lines
04 Mon

Posted a poem
Protection
"Autumn Rain"
Open thread 16 lines
02 Sat

Posted a poem
Nightmare
"A flash of panic"
Open thread 26 lines
02 Sat

Posted a poem
Prayer of An Unwed Mother
"Hush little baby please don’t cry"
Open thread 20 lines
February 2013
28 Thu

Posted a poem
I Want To Be The Girl That Flies
"I want to be the girl that flies"
Open thread 17 lines
27 Wed

Posted a poem
Winter of My Heart
"A naked tree bends in the breeze"
Open thread 12 lines
27 Wed

Critiqued
"NOW!...NOw....Now..........................now?" by @scribbler
"Overall I really enjoyed this poem. Your turned something definitely nonpoetic (writer's block) into something really impressive. I loved the rhyme (not forced at all) and I loved the ending of the poem. In the line: "n…"
27 Wed

First critique offered
on "NOW!...NOw....Now..........................now?" by @scribbler
26 Tue

First publication
The Runaway
26 Tue

Posted a poem
The Runaway
"The streets are silent as I walk"
Open thread 13 lines
26 Tue

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on Apology from @Frenchf

March 2013 — 8 poems

on The Lump In My Throat from @Frenchf

on The Lump In My Throat from @Rula

on Dangerous Game from @Frenchf

on Prayer of An Unwed Mother from @Ian.T

on Prayer of An Unwed Mother from @Esker

on Dark Knight from @Esker

on Dark Knight from @Frenchf

"NOW!...NOw....Now..........................now?" by @scribbler

on "NOW!...NOw....Now..........................now?" by @scribbler

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