bjucks

Member since March 9, 2018

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Pieces of the puzzle

Posted Apr 22, 2020 · 26 lines · 2 critiques

May my image forever hold
Its weight in scale and gold
Distorted it will soon seem
Unavoidable with sweet time
And the space in between
But still, wrap it with a bow
And fancy heart arrows
Because somewhere in there
A wild love is all you know
When you look back on us
After finding out who you are
On your couch, or in the car
I hope you smile and trust
That it was not for nothing

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Despite of how we tried
To empower each other
And mirror endless love
There was nowhere to hide
Something inside me changed
That’s when I began to realize
To love is also to lose
Permanence is fleeting
No matter how you show
Loyalty and devotion
You cannot fix something
That already been broken

bjucks’s timeline

March 2023
09 Thu

Anniversary
5 years of membership
April 2020
25 Sat

Received a critique
on Pieces of the puzzle from @Gracy
"Good poem, needs some tweaking because you've missed out on some grammar rules. Will try to return soon. All the best, it's a sad poem but so true."
25 Sat

Received a critique
on Pieces of the puzzle from @c lynn brooks
"that has already been broken (add the word has or perhaps that already is broken very sad poem but all to often true"
22 Wed

Posted a poem
Pieces of the puzzle
"May my image forever hold"
Open thread 26 lines
March 2020
14 Sat

Posted a poem
Renewal
"I now know the pain I’ve slowly spread."
Open thread 17 lines
January 2020
07 Tue

Critiqued
"THE ROAD THAT LEADS TO THE FOREST " by @Drey Hommies
"I enjoy the deeper message in this Drey. The main message i got after 3 read throughs is everything in moderation, because objects do not hold as much value as we think, and it truly is the little things that count when…"
05 Sun

Received a critique
on Remember to forget from @Eumolpus
"I think that covers it more poetically. My take. Glad you agree. Good poem!"
04 Sat

Received a critique
on Remember to forget from @Eumolpus
"Nice charged images and pace. The poem leaves me with strong emotion. My only suggestion is about “run run run” which for me feels a little Dick And Jane children books, perhaps before your time... “See spot run run run…"
03 Fri

Posted a poem
Remember to forget
"It’s strange how life unfolds for some"
Open thread 18 lines
November 2019
10 Sun

Received a critique
on The growth spurt from @Sparrow 42
"I found this very hard to read. To you it was a logical train of thoughts. This is where we must be careful as we are sending out works to many people. It seemed to portray a beginning of a child and its progress until…"
October 2019
17 Thu

Posted a poem
The growth spurt
"In the dark, dusty corners"
Open thread 35 lines
September 2019
29 Sun

Received a critique
on Faces from @Sparrow 42
"As you grow older I am sorry the short term memory flows away to that of a goldfish, and since the start of Neopoet I have been around the bowl a few times lol. I joined as Ian T a while ago BC "before collapse" then ha…"
28 Sat

Received a critique
on Faces from @Sparrow 42
"There may be a need for simplicity in your words, I have just read two of your works and there in the spaces betwixed a furry of dictionaries long words there was a lovely theme. I don't spend so much time here now, it…"
27 Fri

Received a critique
on Faces from @Geezer
"that you had some difficulty in getting your rhyme scheme together. Then once you did, you paid more attention to making rhyme than the sense of the work. You have some great lines here : "The moment is here and now Tim…"
26 Thu

Critiqued
"MENTORS" by @scribbler
"Enjoyed the easy read/flow here Stan. It's so easy to go down the rabbit hole with our favourite writers sometimes Although you may never be as well known as your favorites.. I hope they (amongst others on here) continu…"
26 Thu

Posted a poem
Faces
"Roses and cinnamon dance,"
Open thread 18 lines
07 Sat

Critiqued
"The Cities Below " by @Eumolpus
"Ahhh thanks for the clarity. It was reminding me of hollywood's version of the tale. 'The last pharaoh' which i definitely watched as a kid. And indeed, there is no plan B. Only the here and now. BJ"
07 Sat

Posted a poem
Misplaced
"Perpetuating bliss of gifted silence -"
Open thread 37 lines
07 Sat

Critiqued
"The Cities Below " by @Eumolpus
"Very biblical sense.. and not far off from what the future could easily turn into. Our armageddon will be our own doing, in which most will suffer. It's sad for the children being brought up in this world. Were already…"
July 2019
19 Fri

Critiqued
"Institution is a State of Mind" by @Marthalyn
"Love the power in this short poem. The lines in the first stanza set the tone and reminded me of a dingy prison. A place you don't want to be... A nice transition into the second half with the emotion. Well done! "There…"
10 Wed

Posted a poem
S.O.S
"Deeply rooted in the process"
Open thread 29 lines
June 2019
29 Sat

Posted a poem
Daydream (Primal poetry phase 2)
"Sharp arrow, free as wind"
Open thread 20 lines
21 Fri

Posted a poem
Wildfire (Primal poetry)
"beauty dual movement"
Open thread 18 lines
17 Mon

Posted a poem
A conversation
"While fragile mind beckoned to heart,"
Open thread 14 lines
May 2019
25 Sat

Posted a poem
Mary
"Exuding the best version of Mary possible"
Open thread 28 lines
March 2019
13 Wed

Posted a poem
The last say
"A storm of darkness prevailing on"
Open thread 25 lines
09 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
January 2019
31 Thu

Critiqued
"Pieter" by @Lowell Mark
"Could just be a reference I'm not familiar with. Otherwise, amazing poem mark! The imagery it put in my head.. was dark and hellish. The second to last stanza is golden. Well done!"
August 2018
29 Wed

Critiqued
"A Life " by @Sir Bernard
"Consistency in your theme made for a great read. I think this poem speaks to people who are struggling with there purpose in life or choices they've made."
March 2018
23 Fri

Critiqued
"Hangin' Van Gogh" by @trekker
"This is a great poem! he defenitely was a mysterious, talented artist kept me enaged from start to finish"
23 Fri

First critique offered
on "Hangin' Van Gogh" by @trekker
17 Sat

Most-discussed work
Irish times

14 critiques to date.
09 Fri

First publication
Don't mind me
09 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

Location: British Columbia, Canada

Favorite Poets

William Butler Yeats

Robert Frost

Edward Fitzgerald

Rumi

Recent Work

Don't mind me

Posted: 9 March, 2018

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Contest Wins

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Workshops

		Skill level:
Primal Poetry	(syllabus)	Plunge Pool	Started 2019-06-17	Concluded
Basic and Essential Meter	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2018-04-12	Concluded

5 years of membership

on Pieces of the puzzle from @Gracy

on Pieces of the puzzle from @c lynn brooks

"THE ROAD THAT LEADS TO THE FOREST " by @Drey Hommies

on Remember to forget from @Eumolpus

on Remember to forget from @Eumolpus

on The growth spurt from @Sparrow 42

on Faces from @Sparrow 42

on Faces from @Sparrow 42

on Faces from @Geezer

"MENTORS" by @scribbler

"The Cities Below " by @Eumolpus

"The Cities Below " by @Eumolpus

"Institution is a State of Mind" by @Marthalyn

One year of membership

"Pieter" by @Lowell Mark

"A Life " by @Sir Bernard

"Hangin' Van Gogh" by @trekker

on "Hangin' Van Gogh" by @trekker

Membership begins

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