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aviisevil
Member since November 6, 2014
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Priest of the pyre
Castle black; of ashes
Burning on a swamp of fire
withholding self-
And 'em stones and saphire
One fall a thousand feet
Lies in ruin a temple and shire
A Priest rests in grave
Breathing smoke from the pyre
His eyes closed-
Wearing a face of gold
In his wake lies the tomb
Of years young and old
With a tear he awakes
To witness a weather so cold
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Wither and then he aches
With the dread one beholds.
In shadow he awaits
For the need of a blue sky
Morrow might not breed
But the yesterday never dies
He grieves of the martyred
And enemies who pry
The key is painted beyond
And the door is kept nigh
Dark walks through the surface
Falling on this ragged terrain
Wearing a cape of silver
In moon-light it glitters again
As holy clouds eat the stars
Scars tear open for a rain
Written in stone; a tale
That no one but one can claim
Hanging by a cliffs name
A potrait clings to a thread
Gave birth to the wind
When the river took a breath
Now the ancient lies cold
And the mourner dead
Distance that divided
Consumed the steps those led
Castle black; of ashes
Burning on a swamp of fire
withholding self-
And 'em clocks and saphire
Whence the priest is dead
Avenged by the sire
Embers would breathe again
From the tears of the pyre
To forever walk in a circle
Of a fool and a liar
All that is must be gone
And be born again-
From the depth of the pyre
aviisevil’s timeline
- November 2024
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06 WedAnniversary
10 years of membership
- November 2019
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06 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
- January 2019
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28 Mon
- September 2016
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13 TueReceived a critique
on The barren sky from @Sparrow
"Have tried to read this one but it needs room to breathe, Try to break up the lines into Stanzas of four or five lines each. Try to sort out the flow and as the write and use of words is very good this will make a grand…" - November 2015
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06 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- March 2015
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21 SatReceived a critique
on Priest of the pyre from @wesley snow
"First a very belated welcome to NeoPoet. I hope you stay a while and take advantage of everything the site has to offer. As to the poem, I won't say I understood everything. Some of it muddled in my mind. That's me. Whe…" -
21 Sat
- January 2015
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02 FriReceived a critique
on A way back home from @wesley snow
"Here goes: I don't like Verso Libre (free verse). Something seems to be lacking in its language, but I must always take the moment and address a free verse piece that was able to move me with its poetry. This is excelle…" - December 2014
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31 WedReceived a critique
on A way back home from @emogothgirl
"this is interesting. I will admit I didn't like the beginning much, but it definitely grew on me as I read it and the story unraveled. I find it kind of quirky that the meter doesn't always exactly match up; but I think…" -
31 WedReceived a critique
on A way back home from @Ian.T
"I loved this piece it tells a story so well, and suited to our epic poems. Loved the description of your journey and then the real words of you have to find your own way in all things, maybe the clock face is painted bl…" -
29 Mon
- November 2014
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30 Sun
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21 FriReceived a critique
on people are strange from @Rula
"and a warm welcome to the Neopoet. I wish you a happy and fruitful stay. This is the first of yours that I read. I like how you've listed the types of people. I too like the repetition of some lines. However some lines…" -
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20 ThuCritiqued
"Palestine...My Love (Stan's Contest)" by @Rula
"I found it be very raw and marvelous to say the least, the flow is perfect and so is the theme, you drawer me in with your flow and the only problem I had was that I wanted more by the end, a flawless write for me." -
20 ThuReceived a critique
on ma'am, why did Titanic sink? from @Ian.T
"Probably the titanic sank because of a few men's stupidity, and taking on too much Ice. I have a poem someplace of a polar bear that went into the shipping office in Liverpool wanting to know what happened to the iceber…" -
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15 SatHighest posting month
November 2014 — 7 poems
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07 FriCritiqued
"S U B T L I N A Z U N S H " by @Esker
"I found the write to be very chaotic, it lends a distorted feel to the write and can either be received positively by some or negativity, depending upon the poet itself. In my case I liked it very much, the words are at…" -
07 FriCritiqued
"Walking with whom" by @Ian.T
"When I read this write 'epic' came naturally to my mind, the story you weave is magnificent. I like the second version more as it was more in flow but the first version had a more hold on my thoughts. Amazing piece, sir." -
07 FriCritiqued
"BEAUTY OF DISTANCE" by @scribbler
"I like how this write draws in the reader and then leaves them grasping for more." -
06 ThuCritiqued
"PAY ATTENTION" by @Starlight
"A beautiful piece in a rhythmic flow, I loved how it draws a reader in and never breaks his attention." -
06 ThuFirst critique offered
on "PAY ATTENTION" by @Starlight
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06 ThuFirst publication
The whispers of the end
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06 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
My name is avi Sharma and I hail from India, I am currently pursuing engineering in computer science. I love writing, not just poems. I like to think of myself as a poet and somewhat a philosopher too, though, i have much to learn. I began writing at a young age to let my emotions out and it is still the major factor of my output. I'm very awkward as a person but very confident as a poet and that's why i created a type of alternate ego for me 'aviisevil' for it lets my words flow more freely. I usually write dark writes and try to make them open to interpretation. I hope to grow as a poet and someday publish my own work.
Location: india, jammu, j&k, IND
Recent Work
Priest of the pyre
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A way back home
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people are strange
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ma'am, why did Titanic sink?
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Angry Again
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The barren sky
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An eye for a heart
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The whispers of the end
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