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Ashes17
Member since October 23, 2024
Member for 1 year, 7 months
That Song
Arrived...
Two weeks after
In the car, I could hear you
Asking, " where is she, where is she?"
And I smiled and know immediately
That's me, he is looking for
His salt, his cotton, his sister
I got out of the car
See you running towards me as I ran towards you
" I missed you", you said
Sarcastically, I said, " you did", but my heart smiled
Because I did too
You took me by the hand,
You said, " come, come I have a supprise for you"
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I followed
In our play room., you told me hoe you felt
When you woke and mommy told you,
" she went away for schoolholidays"
They knew that you wouldn't let me go,
Not ever, not without you
You asleep, was the only option they had
" you were gone, I cried and called your name
Out loud, hoping I'm in time but no
I heard a song the radio
And I missed you more"
You started singing, " yes it's better to say
You're okay, but I think about you
I hope you're okay, I going to miss, I will long
For you, before I forget, take care of my heart
Because you took it with you, I miss you"
I looked at you, very supprised
I knew you would miss me, but that much...
You made a deal, " promise me that you won't ever
Leave again, I made that promise
Knowing that I wanted too but now
I won't ever...
We played hide and seek and you told me,
" one day you will search for me and won't find me"
Years went by
Attacked in our house
Mommy’s brother, with an axe, really?
In your sleep, again
Deceived you but this time...
Killed you, uhhhhh
I got away
At the hospital they told me, " mommy is no more"
I cried, I did and they waited
Then, " what he did to your mother,...
He did to your brother"
No,no,no,no,no,no my brother, no,no
My world shattered before me in pieces
And there...
Was absolutely nothing, nothing
I could do,nothing.
In a blink of an eye, I failed you
I blamed me, I let you down
As salt and pepper, cotton and needle
We were suppoused to be together
Forever together, and now...
I'm here, no pepper, not a needle.
In the store, I walked in
On the radio, I heard
That Song, your song, my song, our song
Only difference is
You're not coming back, not ever
"I won't find you", right,
you were right
That Song
" take care of my heart Because you took it,
With you"
I still remain, optimistic
Hoping that I'll find you
Sitting somewhere, waiting for me
My life now, it's a miserable
Big lonely mess
And I literally don't feel a thing
I hate this life
I hate everything about it
Everything, there's no you in it
So there's no me in it
Salt and pepper, cotton and wool
After all...
That song
Ashes17’s timeline
- October 2025
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23 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- October 2024
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24 Thu
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24 ThuReceived a critique
on You Lived Then You Die from @Rula
"A warm welcome to Neopoet. I echo both Candle. sir Gee re the good writing and sorry for the big loss. I don't want to be mean, but I got two more tiny typos that would hinder the smooth flow. The line "Atleast your…" -
24 ThuReceived a critique
on You Lived Then You Die from @Geezer
"to all of us, every now and then. Sometimes, we are just too close to whatever we have written, and when we have posted it, find all manner of things like misspelled words, etc. Keep it up, you have a good start. Geezer…" -
23 WedReceived a critique
on You Lived Then You Die from @Geezer
"has said, the loss of close relationships can color our whole lives. You write of this loss as though it were very recent. I'm sorry for your loss. Welcome to Neopoet. Oh, by the way, the [to] in the line "And he was [t…" -
23 WedReceived a critique
on You Lived Then You Die from @Candlewitch
"The pain with which this piece was written, is so palpable that I feel it resoundingly! I take it that you have faced some terrible losses in your short life? Your brother and your mother? I am so very sorry for these t…" -
23 WedFirst publication
You Lived Then You Die
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