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anonymus
Member since September 5, 2022
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Stop romanticising immortality, dear butterfly
Life eternally surrounds him,
Shifting through time
Dancing around his scythe
Like a butterfly in the wind
Blissfully unaware
Of its imminent death
Flirtation with Grim Reaper
Being the one true thing
Keeping her heart beating
Toying and teasing
He watches her grow old
Imortalising her youth
But at what cost?
For a romance with the grim reaper
Has never been known
To be one of stability
Or compassion.
anonymus’s timeline
- September 2023
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05 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- September 2022
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23 FriReceived a critique
on Stop romanticising immortality, dear butterfly from @Abby
"I like the metaphor you have going." -
20 TueReceived a critique
on Stop romanticising immortality, dear butterfly from @Geezer
"of how eternity can be in the cards for a something that flirts with death, unless it is life itself? I think the first line might say: "Life eternally surrounds him". Of course, it is up to you, as it is your work and…" -
20 TueCritiqued
"Strings of Silver" by @Samuel Onyeche
"She was truly a beautiful person, may she rest in peace, reunited with her love. Your title relates well to your poem well. I don’t have any specific feedback to give, I enjoyed this very much!" -
20 Tue
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18 SunReceived a critique
on She. from @RoseBlack
"Between the deadly side of a wave and the toxicity of the woman. A short, but effective write. ." -
18 Sun
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15 ThuHighest posting month
September 2022 — 5 poems
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08 ThuReceived a critique
on Blistered and Burning from @Ray Whitaker
"Your writing reminds me of W.C. Williams." -
08 ThuReceived a critique
on Blistered and Burning from @Geezer
"that might make this a little smoother I would leave out the [worst] making the line say: The consequence of our ending [and the lack [of] effect [my] leaving blister[ed] Your language use has been addressed The pace of…" -
07 Wed
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06 TueReceived a critique
on Remind Me Again from @RoseBlack
"I love how you combined such intense emotions into a short verse. Excellent use of language and flow. ." -
06 Tue
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06 TueCritiqued
"The way i see it " by @Emory
"I find familiarity in your words of grace and essence of sorrow. As mentioned, capitalization is important, but I have read many poetry books where it is instead embraced, so I suppose capitalization depends on the aest…" -
06 TueFirst critique offered
on "The way i see it " by @Emory
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05 MonFirst publication
I find trouble in loving myself
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05 Mon
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05 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
I am sparkless and undevoted.
Favorite Poets
William Shakespeare
Emily Dickinson
Oscar Wilde
Homer
Charlotte Bronte
Recent Work
She.
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Blistered and Burning
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Remind Me Again
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I find trouble in loving myself
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