Anderclunk

Member since March 13, 2024

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Monologue

Posted Mar 27, 2024 · 36 lines · 9 critiques

I poured them all out
Tender feelings
Calmly
Said what my heart thought about
The subject of us
Soft words echoed
In the space between us
Spoken blindly
But true

And the lamp didn't blink
The floor flatly didn't think
The walls just stood there, blank
They all had you to thank
For the expression on your face

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Was just the same

And the stairway didn't care
Nor did the couch or easy chair
And the ceiling, above it all
Just made me feel so small
And slight like you do
Small and slight like you

And the window shared my pain
Reflected clearly your disdain
The table wasn't moved
That made the two of you
Made me desperate to run away
From the words you wouldn't say

I stood there for a while
Understanding, but
Confused
Beating myself up about
The subject of us
Heart beats echoed
In the space inside me
Never to be answered
by you.

Anderclunk’s timeline

March 2025
13 Thu

Anniversary
One year of membership
April 2024
01 Mon

Received a critique
on Monologue from @Geezer
"Steve. LoL ~ Geezer. ."
01 Mon

New follower
@Candlewitch
01 Mon

Received a critique
on Monologue from @Candlewitch
"(may I address you by your name?) I much enjoyed your rhyming lines. But, these are my favorite lines: I stood there for a while Understanding, but Confused Beating myself up about The subject of us Heart beats echoed I…"
March 2024
30 Sat

Received a critique
on Monologue from @Geezer
"is important! It indicates the utter tediousness of the whole thing. The thought that you don't matter at all; this is just another "Whatever". At least, that is my impression of it. Only the authoress knows. Be interes…"
29 Fri

Received a critique
on Monologue from @Rula
"sir Gee. This is bittersweet and yet I enjoyed reading once and again. I just found the repetition of "and" unnecessary especially in the second stanza. Just me, you can take it as a suggestion or leave it, it's your po…"
28 Thu

Received a critique
on Monologue from @Geezer
"that the AI takes into consideration, the rhyming that goes on in this piece. Sometimes, the fact that rhyme is an important part of the whole thing, is missed. There are only so many ways that you can rhyme certain thi…"
27 Wed

Posted a poem
Monologue
"I poured them all out"
Open thread 36 lines
27 Wed

Critiqued
"Blues Singer" by @Lavender
"Love the flow and the sites and sounds. A nice drenching of the blues. Very well done. Anderclunk"
27 Wed

First critique offered
on "Blues Singer" by @Lavender
26 Tue

Received a critique
on I-95 from @Lavender
"most welcome! L"
21 Thu

Received a critique
on I-95 from @Lavender
"Hello, and welcome! So very clever. I felt the weight of the travels "down" - the negative, the heavy, and the painful. Emotions, not literal direction, leading the way. And likewise, the trip "up" filled with the hope…"
20 Wed

Posted a poem
I-95
"I went down south up to North Caroline,"
Open thread 27 lines
13 Wed

First publication
I-95 (since unpublished)
13 Wed

Joined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

New Jersey native, recently transplanted in Florida. I enjoy the challenge of mixing and combining words to make a poem that pops.

Location: Florida, United States

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Monologue

Posted: 27 March, 2024

I-95

Posted: 20 March, 2024

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Monologue

"Blues Singer" by @Lavender

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on I-95 from @Lavender

I-95

I-95 (since unpublished)

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Monologue

I-95

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