AmmaKonadu

Member since March 21, 2012

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Trapped

Posted Jul 13, 2012 · 23 lines · 6 critiques

The melody in my heart turns discordant
My tears freeze midway down my cheeks
To my flesh I've now become a servant
And my mind with immense sorrow, leaks.

Pain is a constant visitor
In this damned body of mine
Guilt, ever so sinister
Charges me a heavy fine

Anxieties like large, flesh-eating termites
Crawl up my every opening
Feasting greedily on my insides
Dear Lord, what is happening?

Must I stay like this forever...
Dining with images of my fears?

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Must I, Oh Abba, again shiver
At the memories of past years?

I say NO

Do not let go...

Hand me back my sanity
And save me from this death i'm locked in

For I am trapped...

Trapped...

... in my own body.

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July 2012
22 Sun

Received a critique
on Trapped from @judyanne
"but imho you should lose all the exclamation marks - your write itself should implicitly imply them with your word usage just me i insist - but i find them distracting... great rhyme in 'discordant / servant', 'visitor…"
20 Fri

Received a critique
on Trapped from @Candlewitch
"As Ian has stated, it is a brave write. There is much honesty here, within the suffering. My favorite lines (were hard to choose): I say NO! Do not let go... Hand me back my sanity And save me from this death i'm locked…"
17 Tue

Received a critique
on Trapped from @Ian.T
"That we suffer so is hard and not sure which of the master plans if any to say this is. Maybe just maybe it is our own plan and that we suffer so is for us to learn though sometimes think that the lessons are so hard fo…"
13 Fri

Posted a poem
Trapped
"The melody in my heart turns discordant"
Open thread 23 lines
June 2012
05 Tue

Critiqued
"A No-Tell Motel" by @docmaverick
"the read. But one suggestion though, i think the last but one line will read better like this; "I then realized and saw with both my eyes" just a suggestion though. All the same, it made me laugh, thanks!"
05 Tue

Critiqued
"Ama" by @William Saint George
"Ama should read this."
May 2012
29 Tue

Critiqued
"howz the kid?" by @loved
"Empowering, Loved. Many like me need to see things clearly."
29 Tue

Critiqued
"Taming Of The Beast (eddy styx) (rhymed)" by @Candlewitch
"Eddy Styx. Wish i could find a suitable name for my dark side. Love this!"
29 Tue

Received a critique
on From a Distance from @loved
"got scared good ones and raced like in 100metres race i see you are BOLD TC INTERNET IS DICEY"
29 Tue

Received a critique
on From a Distance from @loved
"but listen to him be not afraid for we all compose in our own inimitable ways... if you show a trace of fear you shall run , so just thank him as we all are individual entity each one a different human..."
29 Tue

Received a critique
on From a Distance from @weirdelf
"it's not so much lack of internal logic, just that it is 'nice' fluffy content. But a pretty read."
29 Tue

Critiqued
"Embodiment Accepted" by @loved
"I think loneliness is a choice. I loved this and I love Ian's comment too!"
29 Tue

Received a critique
on From a Distance from @weirdelf
"lack internal logic and the last two lines completely abrogate human accountability."
28 Mon

Received a critique
on From a Distance from @loved
"u r a nice child tc bye when someone comes along just call me with yours and his dob//tob then iIll see what kind of a guy will he be..."
28 Mon

Critiqued
"the distant cry" by @loved
"in there...no need to allow the past to affect the present and what it offers."
28 Mon

Critiqued
"The Ballad Of Kokomo Joe" by @Lonnie
"Another tale told! I love this style of yours, the way you tell the story in a very upbeat manner...it has again reminded me of folk stories told around an open fire on a full moon. Here we call them Ananse (which means…"
28 Mon

Posted a poem
From a Distance
"I had a dream… after a long laboring day"
Open thread 16 lines
25 Fri

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LIES
"A drop of soul and dust did brew"
Open thread 22 lines
08 Tue

Critiqued
"Love is Ugly" by @WonderGolly
"I love this! Sad story told so beautifully. But i think you can make some cuts. it seems unnecessarily lengthy to me (only my suggestion though) *To the deafen(ed) ears of love’s inventors *To him, love catapult(ed) him…"
07 Mon

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"This blessed dew-filled morning"
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"Can you SEE the demons in my head"
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"My occasional friend"
Open thread 24 lines
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"I carried a heavy load"
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"I cannot believe, this very dove"
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"After I write now..."
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"What is this stagnation I see?"
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"One star tonight, went dim"
Open thread 27 lines
16 Mon

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WHEN TOMORROW COMES

24 critiques to date.
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Highest posting month
April 2012 — 10 poems
March 2012
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First critique offered
on "Lessons From Grandpa" (since unpublished) by @Lonnie
21 Wed

New follower
@Candlewitch
21 Wed

First publication
GREY AREA
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First poem published 1 days later.

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About me

Just a young Ghanaian woman who loves to write!

Location: Accra/Ghana/West Africa, GHA

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Wilfred Owen

Claude Mckay

W. H. Auden

John Donne

Shakespeare!

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on Trapped from @judyanne

on Trapped from @Candlewitch

on Trapped from @Ian.T

"A No-Tell Motel" by @docmaverick

"Ama" by @William Saint George

"howz the kid?" by @loved

"Taming Of The Beast (eddy styx) (rhymed)" by @Candlewitch

on From a Distance from @loved

on From a Distance from @loved

on From a Distance from @weirdelf

"Embodiment Accepted" by @loved

on From a Distance from @weirdelf

on From a Distance from @loved

"the distant cry" by @loved

"The Ballad Of Kokomo Joe" by @Lonnie

"Love is Ugly" by @WonderGolly

April 2012 — 10 poems

on "Lessons From Grandpa" (since unpublished) by @Lonnie

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