WonderWoods

Member since January 7, 2017

Member for 9 years, 4 months

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21 Poems

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The Accident

Posted Apr 12, 2020 · 10 lines · 3 critiques

Confusion abounds as thoughts run wild,
The oldest adult is reduced to a child.
Time stands still or moves in sliding slow motion,
All meaning seems lost in the depths of an ocean.
Sounds echo back or are lost in a wail,
As terror reigns and fears prevail.
Crashing and slashing the noise cuts through
As soft men in white bend over you.
Soon they are gone and the night swallows all,
But the memory of it we will always recall.

WonderWoods’s timeline

January 2022
07 Fri

Anniversary
5 years of membership
April 2020
13 Mon

Received a critique
on The Accident from @c lynn brooks
"what is missing is was this written as the first person(you) or is about someone else and you are the bystander"
13 Mon

Received a critique
on The Accident from @Gracy
"Good write about a horrid accident. I do think the rhyming is sort of forced. Form does that, but less obviously. Perhaps you can re-arrange some lines...just my thoughts. Take or toss."
13 Mon

Received a critique
on The Accident from @Geezer
"but it's missing something. Just can't put my finger on it. Maybe it's your habit of running the lines so together rather than putting them in quatrains, that makes it seem so brutally short. ~ Geezer. ."
13 Mon

Received a critique
on Autumnal Equinox from @Geezer
"a lot of good lines here. They just need the proper syntax, to bring out the rhyme and make them pop.~ Geezer. ."
13 Mon

Received a critique
on A Relationship from @Geezer
"are very good, but seem unrelated to each other in the tempo/rhythm. I think if you rework those lines to rhyme, that it could read something like: We started with so little, yet had so very much . To share alone togeth…"
13 Mon

Received a critique
on Looking for Peace from @Geezer
"as guilty of it as anyone, but this seems as thought the lines are in a ragged time and it kind of throws it off. I love the sentiment and the work is plain enough to decipher, the rhythm is just off. I'm sure that you…"
12 Sun

Posted a poem
The Accident
"Confusion abounds as thoughts run wild,"
Open thread 10 lines
February 2020
13 Thu

Received a critique
on The Accident from @LittleGift
"I liked this because it left the reader understanding the impact trauma has. Even though the physicalities of the event ended. All the feelings tied into it, the images of that scene are forever etched in the minds and…"
13 Thu

Received a critique
on The Accident from @Umeh Collins Ebube
"You're welcome. I get your complete message now. I love the way you write..."
October 2019
04 Fri

Posted a poem
Autumnal Equinox
"Equal day and night"
Open thread 16 lines
January 2019
23 Wed

Posted a poem
Magic Night
"Cool dark pools sparkle with starlight."
Open thread 12 lines
23 Wed

Posted a poem
The Little One
"He walks and runs and teeters sometimes,"
Open thread 14 lines
23 Wed

Posted a poem
Friendship and Love
"To grow in love is hard sometimes"
Open thread 16 lines
23 Wed

Posted a poem
A Relationship
"I can't, I can't my soul cries out"
Open thread 16 lines
January 2018
07 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
August 2017
12 Sat

Posted a poem
Looking for Peace
"I've been searching all over through country and town,"
Open thread 14 lines
June 2017
16 Fri

Posted a poem
Definitions
"Pain"
Open thread 65 lines
16 Fri

Posted a poem
Wondering
"I wonder as I wait,"
Open thread 6 lines
09 Fri

Posted a poem
The Widow
"Night slips slowly through the gray shutters"
Open thread 22 lines
February 2017
18 Sat

New follower
@Tater Tot
January 2017
21 Sat

Critiqued
"GOLDEN YEARS" by @DiPrima
"I can relate to this - every day. This was a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing."
20 Fri

Posted a poem
The Apartment
"Binding and grinding a contract can be,"
Open thread 24 lines
19 Thu

Critiqued
"My Life" by @JG Collins
"Hi JG Collins, I like your poem. It feels like the self questioning we all go though. I think I would have enjoyed it more if you had continued on and extrapolated to a hero or villain in your life to muse if they were…"
19 Thu

First critique offered
on "My Life" (since unpublished) by @JG Collins
19 Thu

Posted a poem
Learning
"Writing on blackboards too high to reach,"
Open thread 14 lines
15 Sun

Highest posting month
January 2017 — 6 poems
09 Mon

First publication
The Accident
07 Sat

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 2 days later.

About Me

About me

I'm an old lady who likes to write.
I started my work life as a Middle school science teacher, then lab bench worker, international scientific equipment representative, food ingredient sales rep, back to bench work, then scientific equipment product lead, then retirement. I couldn't stay retired, so I took to technical editing. It seems like I have been writing all my life - instruction manuals, directions for use of equipment, copy writing. In my spare time I have dabbled in poetry. I am curious to find if other people think it is any good.

Location: Maryland, USA

Favorite Poets

Alexander Pope

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Tater Tot

5 years of membership

on The Accident from @c lynn brooks

on The Accident from @Gracy

on The Accident from @Geezer

on Autumnal Equinox from @Geezer

on A Relationship from @Geezer

on Looking for Peace from @Geezer

on The Accident from @LittleGift

on The Accident from @Umeh Collins Ebube

One year of membership

"GOLDEN YEARS" by @DiPrima

"My Life" by @JG Collins

on "My Life" (since unpublished) by @JG Collins

January 2017 — 6 poems

Membership begins

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