victor dyck

Member since September 23, 2022

Member for 3 years, 8 months

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29 Poems

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the ego and reality

Posted Nov 26, 2022 · 9 lines · 4 critiques

dont let an overpowering ego weaken' or change who you are
pollute or' dawn damage your spirit. there are too many spaces between pertinent things in reality
lucid;acceptance clarity. dark brownland is gray or cloudy sometimes foggy
remember your inteligent handsome or beautifull
we cant live without points of light or masses or color
allways be positive people or religion or whateverand green
wolves in the fall winter love the sunshine on snow and white fur
fish like in our big cities as an ocean too have infinite reflections in the ocean
like we have off cars and buildings

victor dyck’s timeline

September 2023
23 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
November 2022
27 Sun

Received a critique
on the ego and reality from @Triskelion
"I think if you rearranged the last two lines, the rest would make more sense. I agree with Geezer also, that punctures and grandmas would smooth it also. Chers! Thomas"
27 Sun

Received a critique
on the ego and reality from @Geezer
"did think of content, and I said so. I said that the theme gave one a lot to think about and made one want to know inspired this write. As to grammar, I don't think that it is too much to ask of a writer that wishes to…"
26 Sat

Received a critique
on the ego and reality from @Geezer
"I would suggest that you spend a little time proofreading your work or at least look it over carefully after you post it. The lack of punctuation, is a little bit odd for us old-school writers and misspellings of common…"
26 Sat

Posted a poem
the ego and reality
"dont let an overpowering ego weaken' or change who you are"
Open thread 9 lines
16 Wed

Posted a poem
thoughts
"most thoughts don't mean too much they concern like and dislike and our relations"
Open thread 7 lines
06 Sun

Received a critique
on SURREAL from @Jackweb
"I agree with Geezer! The moment I saw the body of the poem all capped I ignored it. ."
06 Sun

Received a critique
on SURREAL from @Jackweb
"I agree with Geezer! The moment I saw the body of the poem all capped I ignore it. ."
06 Sun

Received a critique
on strange from @Geezer
"called a signature here. It is not particularly meant for the individual. I get tired of the statement, "I don't care what others think of what I write/wrote. I write for myself. If you don't care what others think of i…"
05 Sat

Received a critique
on strange from @Runa
"While you are right that everyone lives in the real world, writing purely for oneself (even publicly) has many other purposes and motives. Not every page is meant to be another open internet forum. There are perks to ha…"
05 Sat

Received a critique
on SURREAL from @Geezer
"relate much better if you did not SHOUT. Using all caps makes it very difficult to read. ~ Geezer. ."
05 Sat

Posted a poem
SURREAL
"PART OR MOST OF MY LIFE I HAVE FELT KIND OF OUT OF PLACE."
Open thread 6 lines
01 Tue

Posted a poem
predestined or free will
"people seem to know most of the future, but we still ask questions"
Open thread 2 lines
October 2022
27 Thu

Posted a poem
OCEAN OF HUMANITY
"IN A BIG CITY,, IT IS LIKE AN OCEAN, ITS HARDER TO SEE AND PERCEIVE THINGS TOO CLEARLY, LIKE WETHER YOU ARE HANDSOME' OR BEAUTIFULL."
Open thread 5 lines
24 Mon

Posted a poem
light
"we live with light can't live without it and shades of color shades of color fall leaves"
Open thread 2 lines
21 Fri

Posted a poem
general malaise and some happiness
"a big city n the fall has depressed parts of everyone there is joy in the sun"
Open thread 3 lines
19 Wed

Posted a poem
time
"the earth is like a balloon when we walk we make indentations barely notic"
Open thread 5 lines
16 Sun

Posted a poem
kaleidoscope
"life in a city is kaleidoscopic, mesmerizing' sometimes a mixture or rich and poor"
Open thread 7 lines
15 Sat

Posted a poem
impressions
"your family when your younger but especially in your twenties and people in high school"
Open thread 5 lines
15 Sat

Highest posting month
October 2022 — 16 poems
13 Thu

Posted a poem
MISPLACEMENT
"IT SEEMS THAT SOME OR MOST PEOPLE ARE KIND OF LOST MINDS BODIES AND SOULS."
Open thread 6 lines
11 Tue

Posted a poem
inbetween
"inbetween people and objects is transformations to prepare for the next realities"
Open thread 4 lines
September 2022
29 Thu

New follower
@lovedly
29 Thu

Critiqued
"DUSKY TWILIGHT AT DAWN" by @lovedly
"captures some of the essences of life"
29 Thu

Critiqued
"On The Rocks" by @Depressed 1
"alot of anguish reflection"
29 Thu

First critique offered
on "On The Rocks" by @Depressed 1
23 Fri

First publication
perspectives
23 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

i am a published poet one book compared to ginsburg i love summer fields the ocean unique food and coffee

Location: Massachusetts middlesex

Favorite Poets

shelly pope shakespeare dryden robert frost ee cummings t

eliot

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lovedly

One year of membership

on the ego and reality from @Triskelion

on the ego and reality from @Geezer

on the ego and reality from @Geezer

on SURREAL from @Jackweb

on SURREAL from @Jackweb

on strange from @Geezer

on strange from @Runa

on SURREAL from @Geezer

October 2022 — 16 poems

"DUSKY TWILIGHT AT DAWN" by @lovedly

"On The Rocks" by @Depressed 1

on "On The Rocks" by @Depressed 1

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